Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of modern societies, young individuals have been controled by rules and norms limited the range of action. I admit this idea that today's society have brought about much freedom comparing with centuaries and decades ago. I believe that the youth of today are not as rule follower as previous, and the social expectaions is no longer restrictive. I fell this way because of two main reasons, which I will explore in the following passage.
First and foremost, the structure of general education have been utterly changed in recent decades. The public education systems would determine the rules and norms of a society. In the past, youngsters had had to follow rules enacted by family and their elder generation. The old people and small societies palyed a vital rule in constructing rules, which was restrictive. The younger generation had no destiny to reach except for what the former generation had desired. Currently, by the emergence of new education system, many young people can forge their path towards what they desire. Centuries ago, if you had been born in a farmer family, you would have no choice but to be a farmer, like your father. Now, you can reach different goals and supportive legislations have been encated by the politicians to meet requirements in this way.
The second reason, is that new technologies, specially internet-based platforms, can act as a social network in which the youth would be much easier. The virtual social networks are societies but with lower restrictions. For instance, in Facebook, a well-known social network, you would definitely make a social connection and you may run a campaign to reach a certain goal; an act which is so restricted in the real form of life. My experience is a compelling example of this fact. When I was in the high-school I wanted to study abroad, however, my father has no mony to support me. I runned a fund raising campaign in FundRaise social network. I did explain my troubles and toils, and three individual from US helped me to have enough money to apply for a colledge abroad. Haven't I lived in the modern society with its embeded freedoms, I would not have studied abroad.
To sum up, considering all facts, reasons, and examples that I mentioned above, I agree with this idea that social norms and rules are no longer restrictive for youngsters. This is mainly because of new widespread education system and thechnologies with have brought about freedom.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 83
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...range of action. I admit this idea that todays society have brought about much freedom...
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Line 1, column 361, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...l expectaions is no longer restrictive. I fell this way because of two main reaso...
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Line 5, column 204, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
...s of a society. In the past, youngsters had had to follow rules enacted by family and t...
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Line 9, column 777, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Haven't
...h money to apply for a colledge abroad. Havent I lived in the modern society with its ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, except for, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.961352657 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77375890751 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550724637681 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5602838984 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3636363636 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8181818182 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77272727273 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177854502426 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513204758194 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356691319541 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111234927214 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348025014334 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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