No one can decline the fact that we should obey and follow a variety of rules in order to success or just live better. However, vibrant debates on whether rules that communities hope young people to obey are too strict have aroused public attention. As far as I am concerned, it's definitely true that rules set by societies are too strict for teens.
First, the social media, public beliefs and parents’ expectation always set a clear rule for young people that they are obliged to success, and the definition of the success is unified-earning more money. It seems like only in this way can they lead a satisfying life. However, as a result, a huge amount of burden caused by responding to the expectation sometimes, ruins their life in contrast. They are compelled to give up their interests in exchange for opportunities which can earn more money, accompanying enormous pressure. Teenage are not encouraged to be in pursuit of what they really love. Hence, the rule limits young people’s individual development to some extent.
Second, the rule that many companies today only hire people who received advanced degrees makes a wealth of talented teenage without high level education hard to success. Nowadays, almost each corporation places heavily emphasis on high education, leaving fewer chances for young people who don't attend universities. The high threshold set by societies hinders the career development of ambitious young people. As is common sense, high education is definitely not the only criterion to access a person. Alibaba’s Jack Ma is a case in point. Jack Ma attended the Hangzhou normal university, which is a low-ranking college in China. But Jack Ma’s big success shows that being a tycoon has nothing to do with your educational background.
Third, there is an invisible rule that societies downplay the ingenuity of young people. Nonetheless, as reported, young people’s creativity is amazing. It’s not uncommon that elder employees have higher salaries than the new employees. Besides, elder workers always view newcomers as competitors. In this sense, young people should multiply efforts in order to be senior employees. Generally, young people incline to be receptive of new staff and embrace unique concepts, which invariably makes a big difference in the specific case. Thus, the unequal rule would decrease the communities’ productivity.
In short, rules no doubt are too strict for current young people, which should be removed. Meanwhile, it also has negative impacts on societies themselves.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 95
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? - "Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed." - Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ving fewer chances for young people who dont attend universities. The high threshold...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, nonetheless, really, second, so, third, thus, while, in contrast, in short, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34482758621 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94085369357 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9912832108 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.24 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227266995972 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571986670253 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494016576054 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130734049415 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543771165265 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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