In general, people think that teachers are more likely to influence students. They support that teachers are able to guide them to follow right way in an early age. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should be not thought about in a different light. I believe that students tend to be more influenced by their friends because they are able to learn how to cooperate with others and relieve their stress.
First of all, students are able to improve their ability to cooperate with others by their friends. To be specific, as modern society is becoming complicated, tasks that should be done also are complicated. People should collaborate within their group in order to solve their problems, finish their projects and so on. Without this ability, people could not survive in today’s competitive world. They can learn this better by sharing their time with their friends. For example, when I was in university, the university requires me to do graduation project which is huge projects for me. However, at that time, I had no member to do this and visit my academic advisor to solve this problem. It was not helpful for me because he just told me study for this project. Therefore, I had to find another ways to do this. That was to collaborate with my friends and share our knowledge. Eventually, I could finish my graduation project with my friends’ help, not by teacher’s advice. Thus, this shows that teachers would not influence their students than their friends because they could not improve their ability to cooperate with others.
Moreover, students are able to relieve their stress. In other word, in the globalized world, a great deal of companies requires people to do a lot of tasks without consideration about people’s life. It is very stressful for people, which push students to learn a lot of subjects. It is true that teachers are able to teach a lot of things; however, they could not make their students being happy. Friends are able to relieve their cumulative stress, which allows people to maintain health and relieve their stress. It should exist because without this, people could not enjoy a better quality of life. For instance, I was a member of laboratory and stayed with the professor who is my academic adviser. He pushed me to do a lot of projects, which made me being stressful. However, sometime I went out with my friends in order to relieve stress. It was only happiness at that time. As a result, friends are likely to more influence people because they are able to relieve people’s stress.
To sum up, I believe that students are more influenced by their friends because they are able to learn how to cooperate with others and relieve their stress. Consequently, the importance of my views cannot be underestimated in that it can kill two birds with one stone for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, this trend will probably continue for the next generations.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in general', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'it is true', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.206132879046 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.17206132879 0.158761421928 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0630323679727 0.0866891130778 73% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0511073253833 0.046263068375 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0988074957411 0.0685040099705 144% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.117546848382 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0187393526405 0.0351676179071 53% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.65037388185 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0511073253833 0.0309702414327 165% => OK
Particles: 0.00340715502555 0.00188951952338 180% => OK
Determiners: 0.0596252129472 0.0887237588012 67% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0238500851789 0.0209618222197 114% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.015332197615 0.0139019557991 110% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2963.0 2387.08602151 124% => OK
No of words: 507.0 408.028673835 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84418145957 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.341222879684 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.268244575937 0.251872472559 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.161735700197 0.174417080927 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.094674556213 0.112833075102 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65037388185 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424063116371 0.524397521467 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.2688521956 59.2087087015 82% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6684587814 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.9 20.5533526081 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5557470605 48.84282405 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7666666667 120.699889404 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 20.5533526081 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.566666666667 0.644075263715 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 43.7244575937 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.06349206349 1.45489161554 73% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296335071294 0.300154397459 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103309526561 0.103427244359 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.116874780163 0.0752933317313 155% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.418520437748 0.497263757937 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.121714260716 0.151897553556 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106803042129 0.114077575197 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869951013841 0.0781384742642 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.44926823172 0.336927656856 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0489494988299 0.067059652881 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234530337018 0.210909579961 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372779498566 0.0618886996521 60% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.86379928315 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.4623655914 284% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.