Students loans is not always the best option for a student. Working while studying help the student to success gaining experience for the future. I don’t agree with the statement students should take out students loans to avoid working while studying.
First, every person that what to study in the States knows their family income, outcome and how much they can pay for the university. So if I can not afford a university that cost $70,000 I will not even apply to it unless I had a chance of a scholarship.
Secondly, having a part job, working and studying at the same time, help the student to be aware of the use of money. For example, during my high school I lived with my parents. They bought me all my clothes, food, games and whatever I wanted, but then I went to college and I decide to work while study. For this reason I realized that it is difficult to earn money, then from there I became aware and started to save it and do it this I helped my family.
In addition, the best advantage is that if you work since you are in college, you will earn money, helping you family, and earn experience that is important for you working as a worker and student, as well helping you to become more independent.
Taking students loans makes the student have a greater focus on only the studies, however when it comes out, he will have to work to only pay off that university debt, when this money could be used to pay for a master's degree or something else.
To sum up I think that students should work while study because help them in several manners and help the student become more responsible.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'masters'' or 'master's'?
Suggestion: masters'; master's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1316.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46101694915 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34897399473 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542372881356 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3669959317 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.666666667 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337709168984 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13697314017 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146657291789 0.0737576698707 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17562422128 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138968747554 0.0645574589148 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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