I exceedingly agree with the statement. I believe that albeit the huge role of the education and knowledge, being able to simply relate to different people with diversety of personalities is more beneficial for us. The opportunity to find better jobs, learn new things and higher effeciancy of the mind are onlu some of the suveniours that our socializing ability brings us.
To start with, it is an obvious fact that employers in lots of job positions like servicing jobs that are related to the costumers or in jobs that require teamwork look for people who can easily bond with others. Thus, better social skills better jobs, higher salary and better life facilities and convinience. As an example, I can talk about my cousin. He was just simply hanging around and having fun with different people in a party in which, one of the most know merchants in my country happened to be. They met by accident and he made him a job offer that he claims is the best thing that has ever happened to him. He is now his head of the PR with a tremendous amuont of income!
Furthermore,These kind of talents helps you to be both sucessful in your major and in your life by making a balance on it. The skill of understanding and reacting properly with people is usefull in making good different friends who can each help you in variety of ways. For instance, I have this friends who are preservance, hard working and sucessful in their both jobs and their education and I can ask them to help me whenever I feel I need a favor in these areas. In contrary, I have other best friends that are constantly looking for fun and don't care about the real life going on out of the nightclubs and parties who are happen to be my bodies when I need to chill down and relax alittle bit.
At last, it is a known fact that the more the brain is confortable and free from worries the more people become innovative and happy. Hence, having friends who are there for you always makes the mind confortable. We feeling good about ourselves can result in being more inventive and working with higher effeciancy. Aditionally, I think self confidance is so important and makes us see the things that are invisible for us when we are not in a good state of mind about ourselves. So we can be presented by more opportunities when we have stronger relations with others in our lives.
Consequently, I think it is vivid now that relationships play an indispensable and inevitable roles in our lives.
- TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 70
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 60
- Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities 78
- scientists agree that people ruin their health by eating junk food some people think that is the best way to prevent people from eating junk food is to educate them, while others believe that this won't work. discuss both views and give your own opinion. 67
- TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 313, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , These
...remendous amuont of income! Furthermore,These kind of talents helps you to be both su...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...emendous amuont of income! Furthermore,These kind of talents helps you to be both sucessf...
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Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ways. For instance, I have this friends who are preservance, hard working and sucessful...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...that are constantly looking for fun and dont care about the real life going on out o...
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ng on out of the nightclubs and parties who are happen to be my bodies when I need to c...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...t of the nightclubs and parties who are happen to be my bodies when I need to chill do...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, hence, if, look, so, thus, for instance, i feel, i think, kind of, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56433408578 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67747116059 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516930022573 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1436441504 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.333333333 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6111111111 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179712668058 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607446290471 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506676175089 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928430218027 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498874015142 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.