Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
One day everyone has to get a job, so obtaining skills related to the job is very important. many people think that having a strong education background has a pivotal role in job promotion. Nevertheless, it is my opinion that being able to communicate well with people provide us more opportunity for success in career progression. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through noticeable reasons.
First of all, having a strong communication ability makes a happy work environment for workers. we may have some co-workers who we spend a big part of the workday with them. if the staff members have a good relation with each other, they can spend a great time during the workday, which helps them to be more efficient in their responsibilities. For example, I work for a company and I have two co-workers who work beside me in a room. we are very intimate friends: we eat lunch together, go to coffee after a hard day, and help each other in difficult situations, to name but a handful. this close friendship serves us in the path of success and promotion.
Secondly, having social skills is very necessary to attract customers. if you behave very respectfully towards customers, they encourage returning again and preferring your products or services rather than others. For instance, my sister is working in a shopping more than ten years because of having a very strong ability in communication. she says me that relating well to customers is the most important factor for employment. she has many constant customers who go to the shopping just in days she is there. I think shopping stuff is not perfect and being nice to customers is the success key.
To sum up, having the capability of social contact with people lead to enjoying vocation and job safety. this is why I support investment in improving social relationships instead of studying hard in school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, i think, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89440993789 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90823876363 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586956521739 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8608838618 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.5555555556 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223489391467 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643837781827 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449801239501 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136306422299 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334731063643 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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