Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this era, being educated and following a professional career plays an important role in every individual's life and its impact on the living society is unavoidable. In this way, I personally believe that the government must focus on donating budget on universities and high-level studies rather than primary educations. I feel this way for several reasons which the most important ones will be explored in the following essay.
First of all, due to the rapid progress in technology and science, a country needs more professionalists in these fields to keep pace with the world's growth. To be more specific, in the United States of America, there are a great number of scientists, engineers, and professionalists who are trying their best to invent more developed cars and vehicles with fewer amounts of pollution. In this way, Iran which is the country I live in has to recruit more knowledgeable scientists and engineers to be able to use the same technologies and develop the country at least as much as the others are doing. Hence, the need for seasoned and well-educated people with a high level of degrees cannot be underestimated at all.
Secondly, I believe that universities are great places to make the young youth ready for their entire life and grow them in numerous aspects of life. Actually, it is true that most of the human behaviors are developed in the early years of life, nevertheless, since our brains are more developed after the age of 18 and we are capable of making more complex decisions, universities can affect our behaviors and mindset aggressively. To illustrate, before attending university, I believed that the government should focus on education more than social and physical activities at school. However, after joining a social club at university, I totally changed my mind and started to care about other aspects of life more than being educated. And from then, I tried to keep myself healthy both physically and mentally.
Finally, yet importantly, children at the age of 5 to 10 need to learn more about social activities, plays, and mental and physical concepts and have to spend most of their time on playing and doing different activities to find out what they like and specify the way they want to follow in their lives. So, they are not able to make serious decisions and they change their mind multiple times to find out whatever they are really talented in. So, spending money on their education might be a great waste of time and energy.
To sum it up, I deem it essential for governments to spend a great number of their budgets on universities and advanced studies because a developed society needs more experts and more decisive people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'play'?
Suggestion: play
...ted and following a professional career plays an important role in every individuals ...
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Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...career plays an important role in every individuals life and its impact on the living socie...
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Line 2, column 144, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...s in these fields to keep pace with the worlds growth. To be more specific, in the Uni...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, as to, at least, i feel, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91648351648 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82895136497 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536263736264 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.5354899237 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.8125 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4375 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246571834586 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776542963802 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435129779479 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132540219363 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280123145494 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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