Inherently humans do not like changes in their life and do not want to try new things. Personally, I believe trying new things is a necessity in the path of achieving success. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, by exploring new things and taking risks people can understand their new abilities. People who continue doing whatever they can do the cannot explore their abilities and their abilites remain unexplored, but adventurous people are more likely to discover new things in themselves and climb up the ladder of success. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I have a close friend who I have been friends with for more than 6 years. He has a perfect academic profile, such as winning a gold medal in the International Mathematical Olympiad and publishing several papers in top tier conferences. However, about last winter, he took the risk and decided to invest and trade in the cryptocurrency market and by now he is making 300 thousand dollars a month.
Secondly, by exploring new things in life you can meet with new people. It goes without saying that having a great social network is a crucial factor in success. For instance, my cousin is one of those people who changes jobs every month. By doing so he has met with many diverese groups of people. Two years ago, he started a company in the IT industry, creating softwares for mangemant of workspaces. He contacted his former workplaces and made a fortune by selling the customized software to them.
In conclusion I am of the opinion that trying new things and taking new risks is a crucial factor in becoming successful. This is because, it leads to a deeper insight in our intrinsic abilites and because it grows our social network.
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- TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
... Two years ago, he started a company in the IT industry, creating softwares for mangem...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77022653722 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71320962657 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57928802589 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1771117119 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7058823529 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1764705882 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292939880429 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841404186495 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868393451691 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177041982962 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546060398221 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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