Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The human-being has many abilities and can do many things because of its power of the brain. Brainpower causes people to think and decide what to do or not. Also, they can decide to experience new things and take some risks. This ability is just inserted in the human-being and other creatures do not have this. Sometimes, the ability to take risks and deciding causes us to be more successful in our life by giving new opportunities. However, taking risks may bring us to be a dangerous and unbeneficial situation and retard us from our goal. These two opinions are very controversial between scientists, sociologists, and even general people. In my opinion, although risk-taking can cause a lot of disappointment and failure for us, it is better for us rather than being in our safe mode. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that by taking risks, we can experience more adventures which are very profitable for us. If we take risks we will be in new positions and our creativity is being more prospered. However, if we stay in our safe position and focus on one subject we usually could not succeed on that subject too, because we are not enough experienced and usually cannot do that well. For example, I remember when I was a child my father was a simple government worker and we had a very simple life, we had an old car, an old house and had a lot of financial problems. After a while my father decided to take a risk and open a store, he retired from his job and established a shop. At first, we had not great income too, but after 4 years by increasing his experiences in the business our financial issues are being solved and we had more money to spend.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that although taking risks has many dangers, it can help us to prove our personality into a person who would succeed in the future. New researches state that taking risks can make us a strong person and we can confront easier into future challenges. For instance, I had a friend named John which always takes risks in his life, he changes his study subject, does big deals, travels without any many by just a hitchhike. Although he had many failures in his life, he has a strong personality which we can lay on him.
In conclusion, it is better for us a challenging life, both for our future and our personality. The unique dimension lifestyle can cause us a unique dimension person and we would have many issues in our future life, specifically in our relationships and marriage. We had to experience more to success more.
- TOEFL T P O 4 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement At universities and colleges sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans 70
- It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent s jobs than to choosejobs that are very different from their parent s job 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...deals, travels without any many by just a hitchhike. Although he had many failures in his l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6012793177 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.719109437 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481876332623 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0479114761 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0909090909 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3181818182 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128268313731 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497375543071 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440500167158 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0798130118077 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640536358579 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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