Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Television advertising directed toward young children aged two to five should not be allowed Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

We are living in a world of technological advancement, and it is obviously having a crucial impact on human life. The availability of television advertising for young children aged from two to five years can have a variety of consequences. I believe that children should be prohibited from watching adverts on television at this age. I will explain my position further.
To begin with, adverts on television tend to be one of the ways to increase the profits of companies that manufacture particular products. It is an undeniable fact that those advertising do not do any favors for kids developing neither in physical no in mental maturing. On the contrary, children tend to decrease their improvements in social skills because they spend much less time communicating with their parents and peers. Which can lead to changes in their behavior, and maybe cause psychological spectrum disorders like attention deficit. I can provide a personal example; my cousin was spending so many hours in front of the tv watching not only cartoons but ads also. His main focus was to ask parents to buy him new toys that were famous rather than to work on his skills. He always chooses the TV instead of time with friends or family; after he went to school, he had an ADHD disorder.
For the great majority of parents television is a beneficial thing; they can leave their kid to watch tv and work at home or do something around the house. I think, it is better to let your child participate in any home activity, to teach him or her to keep your environment organized and clean and show that it is essential to take care of yourself and family members with cooking the right meal, for instance. You usually will not see these ideas on the tv advertisements.
To sum up, I think parents should prohibit not only watching ads on television but reduce the amount of time spend watching TV in general, because the deleterious effects are obvious and influence the mental health of young children.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 249, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...for kids developing neither in physical no in mental maturing. On the contrary, ch...
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Line 2, column 672, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...e tv watching not only cartoons but ads also. His main focus was to ask parents to b...
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Line 2, column 682, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...ing not only cartoons but ads also. His main focus was to ask parents to buy him new toys ...
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Line 4, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ce the mental health of young children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, as to, for instance, i think, in general, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78717201166 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78996103305 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591836734694 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1432667405 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.466666667 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174495717885 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556465225102 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627216754941 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108810899232 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509275637764 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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