From the broad perspective, in the current state of affairs we face, in which television become an integral part of every single person. Therefore, it is far-fetched to presume that advertising is represented as a crucial indicator for businessman. I concur with the view that television advertising must not be permitted for addressing those children who are between two and five. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following paragraph.
First and foremost, health of young children will adversely be affected by commercials. Since most advertisements which is exhibiting in television are about the junk food, unhealthy beverage and so on. So obesity, diabetes, heart disease are the product of these commercials. For instances, my friends kid is suffering from obesity as she is drawn to the improper commercials.
Secondly, kids are not logically immature and they are likely misinterpret the message which convey in advertisement and also they tend to focus on negatives rather than positive sides of message. As an example, my four years cousin incline to imitate those things which contain inappropriate and junk content. Unfortunately these kinds of advertisement are everywhere.
Thirdly, commercials encourage young children to persuade their parents in order to purchase it. If they do not obtain that product they feel inferior when they compare themselves to other peer. Also, they expect their parents to buy latest and high brand products. For example, my nephew should wear the fancy cloth as she watch commercials which is related to the celebrity.
In conclusion, I really believe that television advertising directed toward young children should not be permitted.
- TPO47 81
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 97, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... their parents in order to purchase it. If they do not obtain that product they fe...
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Line 4, column 324, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'watches'.
Suggestion: watches
...phew should wear the fancy cloth as she watch commercials which is related to the cel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 270.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35925925926 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00102634478 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618518518519 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2434368108 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4375 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193918052862 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633044622978 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813231206055 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125831126407 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100883686899 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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