Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
In the present world, I mean a world full of technologies and achievements by human race, not only the scientific and technological subjects has been changed but also most of communications, relations and behaviours have been modified based on the new technologies. For example, television can be mentioned as an instrument which has affected and occasionally destroyed most of the relationships especially communications among families and friends. I favor the statement that the television has distorted communication among friends and family because of the following reasons:
Firstly, if you have noticed, in some families, most of the times of the members are allotted for watching television. For instance, children are eager to watch programs related to children or teenagers and younger members will be allured to the movies and documentries which are shown in the television. Now, imagine how much time will be remained for them for spending to the other works such as speaking with parents and telling them about their problems and necessities. Moreover, this example is right for parents. Some parents who are chiefly waste their time to merely watch their favourit movies and series will not have adequate time to allot for their children. Hence, one of the destroying impacts of television among families is its time consuming that will cause destroying the communication of the members.
Secondly, television is not always a proper device for using and it can have a negative effect in some characteristics of the family members or friends. For example, when a teenager is watching an aggressive movie which is full of actions and rude scenes, he/she will be impressed by it and may change his/her behavior. Therefore, he/she will become aggressive and his/her communication with the other members will be affected. He/she will not have a friendly and kind communication with members or sometimes might harm them mentality. The impact of television in this case might be even more that the previous reason that I have mentioned. This negative impression might be conveyed to the society and engender some bad behavior in the society.
As a summary, I realy agree with the claim that the television has destroyed the communication among friends and families. When people spend most of their time to watching television, they would not have enough time to have a beneficial communication with the other members of family or their friends. In addition, watching television is not just spending time but it could probably damage the behavior of the people by showing adverse programs or movies which leads to destroying the communication among families and friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the communications') or simply say ''most communications''.
Suggestion: most of the communications; most communications
...ical subjects has been changed but also most of communications, relations and behaviours have been mod...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i mean, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25874125874 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96685412813 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463869463869 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.1341239732 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.705882353 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2352941176 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180154804339 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076274944571 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827115410934 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124651161215 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476668997216 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 10.002688172 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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