Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroy communication among friends and famiy.

I disagreed that television has destroy friend and family. Television was a good friend for decades for two reasons.

First , We can get a knowledge from it from the scientific channels for adult and kids . My daughter wasnt go to the preschool so i was open the television for her to let her know the numbers the letters and the name of animals so it was a good friend for her for two years. I can manage whats channel i want and i can secure the channels so no damage to my daughter .

Second its the thing that can we enjoy with it . By seeing the songs channel or comedy channels . I rememberedwhen momy was sad for her dad's death . I invite her to see the comedy movie with me she kept laughing and laughing and she forget the saddnes .

Thats why i found the television is the most important thing in my living room . However it should used good to bring its benefit .

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Sentence: I disagreed that television has destroy friend and family.
Description: A verb 'to have', present tense, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to has and destroy

My daughter wasnt go to the preschool
My daughter didn't go to the preschool

Sentence: However it should used good to bring its benefit .
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to should and used

Sentence: I rememberedwhen momy was sad for her dad's death .
Error: momy Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: rememberedwhen Suggestion: remembered when

Sentence: I invite her to see the comedy movie with me she kept laughing and laughing and she forget the saddnes .
Error: saddnes Suggestion: sadness

flaws:
No. of Words: 164 350
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 10 in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 164 350
No. of Characters: 688 1500
No. of Different Words: 94 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.579 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.195 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.355 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 43 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 28 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 17 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 10 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.66 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5