Right from childhood every person accumulates different types of experiences of the world they are living in. Through these experiences, people mold their views to survive in every society. Till the dawn of 21st century, the technological development was slow and most of people had not experienced striking change in their life time. Elders had gone through their life without a significant change in the society. But the trend has changed recently because of rapid technological revolutions in every field. In my view, I feel that elders of the late 20th century should adapt to these changes and this could be possible only with the help of young people. I will provide two reasons in support of this and elaborate on, in the following paragraphs.
First of all, when we consider the field of medicine, and its new advancements, that young people could teach their parents as well as other elders in rural areas. We all know that new advancements in medicine reach out to these areas very slowly. Most of the adults do not bother about knowing new developments. So, in this case young people, mostly students, substantially has a lot to contribute to elder people living in such areas. Students might acquire the information through schools then in turn help disseminate this information. This could help older people change their frequently performed rites in curbing certain diseases. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. During my childhood, we used to live in a small village in the countryside. At that point of time prevention for polio disease in the form of drops was introduced. Although government took measures to spread this news to whole district not one in my neighbourhood knew about the prevention. My cousin, 10 years older than me, had known about it and told my father along with other people in the village. Though this news would have been eventually kwown by people but it came into attention a lot earlier by a young person.
Secondly, most of the adults have experiences of the world of their time. But in recent times, this world has undergone many rapid changes. We can also say that the rate of change has been exponential when we compare the recent past i.e., from the last 100 years. In other words, there are many significant changes that have been incorporated into this world from generation to generation. Similarly, these adults hold an age old outdated view of the world. This might not help in the fast-than-ever changing digital world. In order to live content, elders have to learn to adapt to fit into this paradigm.
In conclusion, although some experiences of adults may fare well in this world but it has become mandatory that every person has to change his view of the present and this can be easier with the help of the young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... technological development was slow and most of people had not experienced striking change in ...
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Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...ot experienced striking change in their life time. Elders had gone through their life wit...
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Line 3, column 859, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...se in the form of drops was introduced. Although government took measures to spread this...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, well, as to, i feel, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2331.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87656903766 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66719336561 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523012552301 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1972571697 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3333333333 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7037037037 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7037037037 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121266907028 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0325965031955 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369437681714 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0776093389795 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419685588988 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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