Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? TV, newspaper, magazine and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of celebrities.
Famous people are the epitome of success for many thanks to the publicity they receive from social media and are, more often than not, imitated by those who have an insatiable desire for fame. Although they are widely adored by all people, not all people are influenced by them equally. Bearing this fact in mind a question that is a matter of debate a controversial one is whether social media care about well-known people or not. Agreement is yet to be reached on this issue; however, I am personally on the belief that pay attention to the personal life of celebrities by media will lead to deleterious effects in other people's life especially ordinary ones. In the following paragraph, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
One compelling reason, lending credence to the stance taken above is that in today's hectic world, televisions or other means of communication just think about make a profit and gain a hoard of money. In fact, they bend over backwards to show off in public and glamorized with famous people. Scientifically speaking, although it will be profitable for media, it cause many serious problems for people especially young children. For example, for many people celebrities serve as an arbiters taste morality and public opinion. Indeed, well known people do not make a secret of alcohol or drug abuse and so forth which can provide fertile ground for people to mimic immoral behaviors. Actually, youngsters are more likely to listen to the words of celebrities rather than their own parents because they are not mature enough and might think that these behaviors are acceptable. Delving further into the issue reveal that different kinds of disorders like short term relationship and drugs or alcohol are leading celebrities. It means that when they present on the screen in fact, they widespread immorality that can impact children directly through media. A noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistic revealed by recent social research conducted in our country show that vast majorities of people especially youth are at the risk of social disorders due the fact that media do not respect toward the age of people.
Another reason that is equally important if not more is that if media continuously pay too much attention to the famous people it will jeopardize people's health. Broadly speaking, sometimes celebrities present on screen or glamorized advertise in a hasty manner such as smoking and it can be example for supporters everywhere that it is acceptable to smoke. To put it in other word, destructive habit by well-known people not only can destroy mental and physical health but also can contribute to the low self-esteem. However, what I alluded to above cannot be overgeneralized to all contexts. Alongside with the innumerable benefits it has, indisputably, media are the best means of communication which they can convey majorities of massages about different subjects to the public but hardly can they transmit those massage without glamorized advertising by celebrities. Nevertheless it does not make those preceding benefits pale.
To wrap it up, media care about well-known people and their personal life for different purposes which can bring some consequences. Contemplating all the aforementioned reason one soon realize that life of many celebrities are not ideal and use their characters in media can put people's life especially youngsters into danger due to many social disorders. In addition, media advertise different products in a hasty manner such as smoking that can threat people's health and destroy their mental and physical health.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'well', 'broadly speaking', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.237639553429 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.148325358852 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108452950558 0.0866891130778 125% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0797448165869 0.046263068375 172% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0430622009569 0.0685040099705 63% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135566188198 0.118717715034 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0350877192982 0.0351676179071 100% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84088128893 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0287081339713 0.0309702414327 93% => OK
Particles: 0.00318979266348 0.00188951952338 169% => OK
Determiners: 0.0653907496013 0.0887237588012 74% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0255183413078 0.0209618222197 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0143540669856 0.0139019557991 103% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3611.0 2387.08602151 151% => OK
No of words: 581.0 408.028673835 142% => OK
Chars per words: 6.21514629948 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90957651803 4.48200974243 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.39586919105 0.338922669872 117% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.283993115318 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203098106713 0.174417080927 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.149741824441 0.112833075102 133% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84088128893 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 293.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50430292599 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 62.3034059039 59.2087087015 105% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 25.2608695652 20.5533526081 123% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3428689659 48.84282405 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.0 120.699889404 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2608695652 20.5533526081 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.565217391304 0.644075263715 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 53.6601810971 45.7405998639 117% => OK
Elegance: 1.50588235294 1.45489161554 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289208926659 0.300154397459 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0985744019609 0.103427244359 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0494903265488 0.0752933317313 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.445293520401 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118305263959 0.151897553556 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103352691738 0.114077575197 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611092098197 0.0781384742642 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.451474630303 0.336927656856 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0595065361647 0.067059652881 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209552642111 0.210909579961 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410955189544 0.0618886996521 66% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.4623655914 325% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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