Colleges and universities play important role in enhancing a student's overall personality. Not only in academics but also in extra curricular activities like: sports,stage performances, character development,and other social activities. Personally, i believe that, educational institutes should definitely give equal preference and financial support to sports and social activities. I feel this way for two main reasons, which i will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, there is no doubt that sports gives us tremendous health benefits not only physically but also mentally. There is enough scientific proof that how involvement in physical activities like exercises, games and sports adds quality to life. As, students spend a long span of three to four years at colleges and universities, and if they are only involved in academic studies, they may face health related problems and lack of fitness, which can further result in several diseases. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When i was in my college three years ago, i was totally focused on my studies only and never used to participate in extra curricular activities. There was no sports club in my college, due to which,we students had no option to involve ourselves in physical activities, that contributes to our overall personality both mentally and physically. When i passed out of my college and applied for army services, i was twenty kilograms overweight and got rejected. That moment i realised the profit of adding sports and other physical activities in our routines to stay fit in life.
Additionally, social activities like, dance club, acting club, sports club and other social work clubs for society development, enhance the student's temperament. As well as, engagement in these activities boosts mood and keep away depression like issues. Taking part in tasks related to hobbies and interests keeps a person happier and more lively. For instance, in a research done on two groups of people consisting ten members each, were given a week to prepare for a general knowledge exam. They were provided with proper required materials and books. Group A was told to focus only on studies while group B was given a two hours sports period each day. Finally after a week exam was conducted and unsurprisingly group B performed far better than group A. Possible reasons for this difference could be that group A got bored with studies easily and their brains attained saturation level,on the other hand, group B was given an activity to fresh up their minds and study more efficiently.
In conclusion, i strongly feel that educational institutes must include extra curricular activities like sports and other recreational activities and should also provide funding similar to academic classes and libraries. This is because social activities and sports are equally crucial for overall personality development of students with added health benefits.
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- TOEFL Writing Task 1 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...sities play important role in enhancing a students overall personality. Not only in academ...
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Suggestion: , stage
...extra curricular activities like: sports,stage performances, character development,and...
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Suggestion: , and
...tage performances, character development,and other social activities. Personally, i ...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...nd other social activities. Personally, i believe that, educational institutes sh...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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...el this way for two main reasons, which i will explore in the following paragraph...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...e is a compelling example of this. When i was in my college three years ago, i wa...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...en i was in my college three years ago, i was totally focused on my studies only ...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...lity both mentally and physically. When i passed out of my college and applied fo...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...verweight and got rejected. That moment i realised the profit of adding sports an...
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Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...bs for society development, enhance the students temperament. As well as, engagement in ...
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Line 5, column 658, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ven a two hours sports period each day. Finally after a week exam was conducted and uns...
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...d their brains attained saturation level,on the other hand, group B was given an ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, well, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2493.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32692307692 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92225443894 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568376068376 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 787.5 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2669937549 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.318181818 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2727272727 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17744593698 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511284689521 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456163891739 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124843125146 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508723103469 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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