Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It is commonly believed worldwide that academia is the sole purpose of educational institutions and should have maximum monetary investment and support. The value of extracurricular activities is rapidly shrinking in today’s hectic and competitive world that focuses on academic accomplishments. Nowadays, People tend to assume that students don’t need extracurricular activities in order to succeed in college or in life in general. I strongly believe that institutions should support sports and social activities equally to academia. I believe so for two reasons which I will be discussing in this passage.
One of the major reasons to encourage extracurricular activities in academic settings is the urgent need for students to relax. Limiting students’ ability to participate in extracurricular activities can have negative consequences on their physical and psychological health. It has been scientifically proven that students who don’t take the necessary amount of time off from their schoolwork, develop symptoms of chronical mental illnesses such as anxiety and depression. In addition to that, suicide rates have been increasing amongst college student in the past few decades. Students often get so drawn into their schoolwork that they feel there is no way out. The importance of social activities and sports is witnessed then. For instance, when I was in junior year, I attended long hours of lectures every day, then go home, study and do assignments until past midnight. It was extremely frustrating to keep up with this schedule that by the end of my fist semester as a junior, I started to feel discouraged and depressed. My professor noticed my state and advised me to spend more time outside academia to regain my poise. Thankfully, my university is a huge supporter of extracurricular activities, and I was able to join the swimming team at my institution. Being in a different setting than academic ones had a positive impact on my life as I was able to relieve much of my stress and regain my focus and encouragement.
Another prominent motive for institutions to financially support sports activities, is the high financial return on investment in sports. Since educational institutions’ goal is to invest wisely and to the maximum returns, it is important to note the potential of sports in terms of monetary value. Schools benefit from student athletes during national tournaments and international championships. Financial benefits can come in many shapes and forms, such as advertising campaigns, prize money and sponsorships. To illustrate, universities in the United States give out major academic scholarships for incoming student athletes each year. Moreover, students who are athletes are more likely to get admitted to university than students who aren’t athletes. This is because universities acknowledge the benefits student athletes can bring them. For example, my university supports athletes and encourages them to participate in national level tournaments each year. Two years ago, we won the national championship for basketball. The team started receiving media attention, which in return diverted the attention back to our school and it soon started receiving offers for advertisement campaigns from multiple companies. The pay was substantial enough for my school to do renovations in our laboratories and build a new football field.
In conclusion, it is apparent form the above discussion that proper investment in leisure activities and sports is crucial for students’ wellbeing and schools’ progression. Hence, I completely agree with the given statement.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 660, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... athletes each year. Moreover, students who are athletes are more likely to get admitte...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 803, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'benefits'' or 'benefit's'?
Suggestion: benefits'; benefit's
...is because universities acknowledge the benefits student athletes can bring them. For ex...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, moreover, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3073.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 557.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5170556553 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25438901113 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 304.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545780969479 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 965.7 618.680645161 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0796937162 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.965517241 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2068965517 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8275862069 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170562366335 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509947823395 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593255121776 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113927442661 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309570868846 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 86.8835125448 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 660, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... athletes each year. Moreover, students who are athletes are more likely to get admitte...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 803, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'benefits'' or 'benefit's'?
Suggestion: benefits'; benefit's
...is because universities acknowledge the benefits student athletes can bring them. For ex...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, moreover, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3073.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 557.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5170556553 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25438901113 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 304.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545780969479 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 965.7 618.680645161 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0796937162 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.965517241 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2068965517 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8275862069 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170562366335 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509947823395 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593255121776 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113927442661 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309570868846 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 86.8835125448 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.