Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries.

Submitted by AmyWang on Fri, 07/27/2018 - 20:55

The common aim of universities is to cultivate the all-rounded students. Some people tend to propose that universities should spend more money on libraries than on their students’ sports activities because learning knowledge is the main task of student and exercises are accessories of school life. While this idea seems reasonable, I still insist that sports activities are the same important as the textbooks so that universities should invest the equal money on those two parts.

The main argument for giving money to students’ sports activities is that doing so is responsible for students’ study and physical health. As a proverb goes that all works and no play make Jack a dull boy. In other words, having sports activities is only the way to keep students in good body conditions, but also a good choice for them to be relaxed. To be specific, students are always overwhelmed by their heavy school works which make them feel so tired. By doing some physical exercises, they can relax their bodies and release the pressures in the classroom. Staying in a good body condition is the fundamental of learning efficiently. Thus, universities should put the same emphasis on students’ sports activities and take their effort to develop students’ study and sport life together.

Another obvious benefit of bringing students’ sports activities to the same status of universities’ libraries is that having sports game is the way to cultivate students’ conscious of team spirits and life attitudes. When students attend sports games, they need to learn how to coordinate the relationship between a group and an individual and how to win the game by collaboration. Collaboration also teaches them to be altruistic people and cherish friendships. Therefore, students can learn a lot from sports activities which is not available in books. Spending as the same amount of money on sports programs as on libraries is worthy.

The last reason is that having a good sport team, such as football, helps to improve the reputation of a university. Students usually differentiate whether a college is good school by looking at its ranking in College Sports list. Take my personal experience as an example, I always take academic and sport ability of universities into account. Why I choose University of Southern California as my dream school is because the beautiful campus buildings and high quality faculties, especially its famous football team – USC Trojans football. It is unimaginable for a little girl, like me, is a big fun of football game. So, universities can attract more applicants by investing heavily in sport program.

In conclusion, it is worthy for universities to spend the same amount money on both students’ sports activities and their libraries. Spurring spending in sports not only benefits students body health and personality cultivation, but also increases universities’ reputations.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2497.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35836909871 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2138909771 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497854077253 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4188952165 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.565217391 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2608695652 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40718818876 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118752536601 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108634517773 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25855286966 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0850350226156 0.0645574589148 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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flaws:
the only issue we found out is that some words/phrases are duplicated, so the Unique words percentage is low, it is less than the average:

Unique words percentage: 0.497854077253 0.524837075471 95%

for example, is that is repeated three times:

The main argument for giving money to students’ sports activities is that...
Another obvious benefit of bringing students’ sports activities to the same status of universities’ libraries is that...
The last reason is that...

'not only....but also' is repeated two times:

is not only the way to keep students in good body conditions, but also a good choice...
not only benefits students body health and personality cultivation, but also increases universities’ reputations...

there are more like:
students’ sports activities...

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2376 1500
No. of Different Words: 231 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.11 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.867 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.217 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.94 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.478 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.501 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5