There is no doubt that having interaction with others in the society is the one of the most prominent need that embedded in human's spirits. Even though many people inclined towards an idea that making many new friends can easily get joyfulness, I'm definitely more sure that staying with old friends and maintaining the friendship with old ones will receive more happiness.
To begin with, old friends are more reliable than new ones. In the long time friendship with your old friends, you trust them without doubt more than the new friends you just make in short time. Making new friends is much easier. When you attend a party or other activities, you can talk to many people and find something in common with them. Then you become friends. However, when you are in trouble and meet some problems, the first bunch of people coming to your mind are the old friends. Old friends with time precipitation know you better then new ones. Since you can rely on them for ever and you know they will support you without any hesitate, you would receive happiness and sense of accomplishment. Although by making mew friends there will be many people around you, can you trust them as well as your old friends? More people surrounding can not be representative as getting more supports and help. So maintaining long run friendship is an essential way to get happiness.
The other reason which deserves to say some words here is that, people have more memories with old friends rather than new ones. Many old friends they made is when you high school or university or even when they are in childhood. They can spend time in a same activity, or same tasks which would be efficient for them. Most of the long lasting friendships are usually initiated since school or collage, and lead them to make friends with a same insight, same goal, and is motivated them to care of their friendship. For example, I have had a friends since I was in high school, and both of us wanted to go abroad to further our study so we always study toefl and SAT together. Because we know each other for a long time, until we not only could focus on our weakness, but also decreased the level of our stress. And finally we received the same offer and continued our friendships. Thus, with a lot of memories with old friends, people get more happier.
To sum up, people need to realize that the ability of preserving of friend in the long time not only brings more happiness in the life, bu also give the sense of satisfaction. People have more in common with their old friends, sharing same memories. Old friends will support you all the time.
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Essay evaluation report
is the one of the most prominent need that embedded in human's spirits.
is the one of the most prominent needs that are embedded in human's spirits.
in short time.
in a/the short time.
better then new ones.
better than new ones.
The other reason which deserves to say some words here is that,
other reasons which deserve to say some words here is that,
Another reason which deserves to say some words here is that,
Many old friends they made is when you high school or university or even when they are in childhood.
The time many old friends they made is during high school or university or even when they are in childhood.
not only brings more happiness in the life, bu also give the sense of satisfaction
not only brings more happiness in the life, bu also gives the sense of satisfaction
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you have two main issues:
1. grammatical issues, look:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
2. most sentences start with pronouns, like: we, I , you..., need to change this writing style. maybe read more articles like in VOA learning English, check out how they use subjects and verbs:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 466 350
No. of Characters: 2095 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.646 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.496 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.289 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.417 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.287 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.248 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... new friends can easily get joyfulness, Im definitely more sure that staying with ...
^^
Line 3, column 538, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'better than'?
Suggestion: better than
...riends with time precipitation know you better then new ones. Since you can rely on them fo...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 183, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nds they made is when you high school or university or even when they are in chil...
^^
Line 6, column 542, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a friend' or simply 'friends'?
Suggestion: a friend; friends
...eir friendship. For example, I have had a friends since I was in high school, and both of...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 942, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
...f memories with old friends, people get more happier. To sum up, people need to realize t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, then, thus, well, for example, in short, no doubt, you know, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63010752688 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39335999027 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458064516129 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0293862778 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7083333333 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345582906174 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11644042021 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684783296101 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221156912433 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365595909542 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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