T P O 53 Integrated Writing Tasks
The reading passage and lecturer in the listening deal with the policy of imposing high taxes on cigarettes and other unhealthy products. The reading passage argues that raising taxes for unhealthy products benefits society for three reasons, but the lecturer holds the opposite point of view, and rejects all these reasons.
First, even though the reading passage points out that the high taxes can discourage people from indulging in unhealthy behaviors, and people will buy fewer of unhealthy products. However, the lecturer contends that with the pressure of high taxes, people will choose cheaper and lower quality cigarettes, which will be more harmful to their health than the better quality one. Similarly, imagine how some consumers might react to same taxes on unhealthy foods. They might continue buying the unhealthy foods they prefer even if it's more expensive, and as a result, have less money left to spend on healthy foods. That certainly wouldn't benefit their health. Thus the lecturer can not agree with what the author's words.
Second, despite the statement in the reading passage that taxes of this kind are financially fair, but the lecturer contends that there are many different ways to think about this policy. It is fair for those nonsmokers and people eating healthy diet. However, when taking income in to consideration, it is so unfair for those people earn low income that they will get more burden of life. So, the second point in reading can not demonstrate author's view.
Finally, according to the reading content, the high rate of taxation on cigarettes can increase revenue for government to benefit public welfare, whereas the lecturer prove that even though it do increase the revenue of government, government will not do something to change the law to ban cigarette, since the large income is from tax of cigarette. Government don't want lose this large amount of income. So, the professor contradicts what shows in the reading passage.
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Essay evaluation report
despite the statement in the reading passage that taxes of this kind are financially fair, but the lecturer
despite the statement in the reading passage that taxes of this kind are financially fair, the lecturer //despite or but, one is enough
it is so unfair for those people earn low income
it is so unfair for those people who earn low income
whereas the lecturer prove that
whereas the lecturer proves that
Government don't want lose this large amount of income
Governments don't want lose this large amount of income
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flaws:
1. No. of Words: 324 250 //Write the essay in 20 minutes.
2. No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2 /double check
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 12
No. of Words: 324 250
No. of Characters: 1616 1200
No. of Different Words: 168 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.988 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.365 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.857 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 630, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... spend on healthy foods. That certainly wouldnt benefit their health. Thus the lecturer...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 660, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...certainly wouldnt benefit their health. Thus the lecturer can not agree with what th...
^^^^
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ut the lecturer contends that there are many different ways to think about this policy. It is ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 194, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'does'?
Suggestion: does
... the lecturer prove that even though it do increase the revenue of government, gov...
^^
Line 7, column 362, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...me is from tax of cigarette. Government dont want lose this large amount of income. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, similarly, so, thus, whereas, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1373.03311258 121% => OK
No of words: 322.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15838509317 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43440428357 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.6339960904 49.2860985944 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.733333333 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06452816374 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.3589403974 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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