People, nowadays, have much more freedom to express themselves than twenty years ago. They can show their cognitions though all kinds of methods regardless of age or income. Young people, as an integral part of human being, have their right to participate in discussing any popular topic and exert some influence on significant decision. Thus, I can’t agree with the argument that young people have no impacts on the decision of the whole society.
In recent ten year, young people tend to occupy dominated positions in many crucial fields. These crucial industries lead the development of the whole society and have great influence on the determination of future society. In some new industries, such as the information technology, most of technical companies are inclined to hire young people as employee, even giving some of them high level positions. Recruiting young people keeps the team stay energetic and keep efficient. Technical companies often take staff’s effectiveness into account, when they make important decisions, because the completion of the projects depends on employees’ efficiency. In addition, those young people who stays in leadership posts, grasping some decision-making power, can have impact on final decision of company. Thus, young people today are increasingly joining the process of social development.
Besides, young people are so innovative and ambitious that they can be competitive in many fields. These fields include business industry, hi-tech industry etc, and all of them are essential components in social construction. In business industry, more and more young faces get into attend important conferences to discuss critical economic development problems. The new and advanced ideas are mostly come up with these young businessmen, young researchers. In hi-tech industry, as we mentioned above, a technical company needs innovations to maintain its social competition. Young staff are now playing the main roles in the company because of their curiosity and creativity. They are interested in everything happening outside the world and never stop pursue new things to change the world. For example, Mak Zuckererg, the CEO of Facebook, who are so creative that change the people’s communication way, are now one of the most influential people around the world. Therefore, young people bring the new thoughts and theories to society, and they are gradually changing the world.
Admittedly, the most important positions are still occupied by older people, especially in managerial level and political field. Indeed, old people are more experienced on how to manage employees and how to deal with affairs. However, young people have more potential and possible opportunities than the old people have. Since no one can be born with wisdom and knowledge, young people have more time to learn knowledge and experience process of growth. They will be the decision makers and power leaders as their predecessors in the future society. That is why young people can’t be separated from development of future world. Instead, they are the most influential group of people in the future of social development.
In conclusion, young people are the future of the society. They are slightly changing the world by using their energetic and the creative thinking. Young people today have completely different ways of thinking and live in different life styles, which modify and influence the ideology of society. They are destined to be an extraordinary generation.
- T P O 53 Integrated Writing Tasks 74
- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. 84
- TPO 42- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. 90
- Essay topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to give your opinion. 80
Essay evaluation report
those young people who stays in leadership posts
those young people who stay in leadership posts
more and more young faces get into attend important conferences
more and more young faces get into or attend important conferences
The new and advanced ideas are mostly come up with these young businessmen
The new and advanced ideas are mostly coming up with these young businessmen
Mak Zuckererg, the CEO of Facebook, who are so creative that change the people’s communication way, are now one of the most influential people
Mak Zuckererg, the CEO of Facebook, who is so creative that changes people’s communication ways, is now one of the most influential people
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flaws:
the main issue of the essay is that most sentences start with either 'young people' or 'they'. Need more varieties for the subject of sentences.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 31 15
No. of Words: 545 350
No. of Characters: 2876 1500
No. of Different Words: 269 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.832 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.277 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.728 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 215 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 160 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 123 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 85 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.581 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.015 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.323 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.452 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2987.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 545.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48073394495 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90287523371 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508256880734 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 921.6 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7573825124 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3548387097 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5806451613 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16129032258 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217403680439 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652357968486 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574077507792 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140726247117 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372846925289 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 86.8835125448 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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