Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When people take time to relax, they should enjoy hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work.
Nowadays, people are very busy with their work so they are really stressed out and tired after working for a long time. It is necessary for them to take a break after work. As far as I am concerned, I think people should enjoy hobbies or physical activities that are the same as their work to relax.
First, enjoying the same hobbies and physical activities as their jobs is helpful for their work. While people are relaxing, they maybe come up with some new ideas and solutions to the problems that they meet. In this way, they are more good at their jobs than before. Clearly, they are more likely to get promoted and higher salaries, which will definitely make them happy. For example, I am an English teacher in a school, and I am willing to listening to English music to get relaxed. Therefore, I usually use these songs to teach my students to learn English grammar, which is so interested for them that they can learn better. Accordingly, same hobbies or physical activities as what people do at work to take a break can help them a lot.
Second, strengthening relationship between coworkers is another reason why people like to enjoy the similar hobbies and physical activities as their work. For one thing, since people are able to become more familiar with their work in this way, they will have more topics to talk about with their colleagues. For another, people can join physical activities together to have fun and release their pressure. For instance, they can set up a soccer team with other coworkers. While they are playing soccer, they have to work together to come up with some strategies to win the game and also they need to practice how to make short or long passes to each other correctly. During the whole process, they will communicate with others a lot and know more about each other, which will really strengthen their friendship. Hence choosing the similar hobbies or physical activities as people’s jobs for relaxing is a wiser option.
As the two reasons mentioned above, it is easy to reach the conclusion that people can benefit more from enjoying hobbies or physical activities that are similar as what they work than the different hobbies or physical activities from their work. In this case, they are capable of living a better life in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 625, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...interested for them that they can learn better. Accordingly, same hobbies or physical ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 408, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...to have fun and release their pressure. For instance, they can set up a soccer team...
^^^
Line 9, column 814, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ill really strengthen their friendship. Hence choosing the similar hobbies or physica...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, hence, if, may, really, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77443609023 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45907195512 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46365914787 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1200408905 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.263157895 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381729428603 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132806594666 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854821748167 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274201158684 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351149896592 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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