Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Views differ when it comes to the issue of whether youths are responsible about their communities nowadays or not. Although some people maintain that today young’s people do not attribute any time to their society, there are others have negative attitude toward it. As far as I am concerned, young people have decreased their participation in association in that not only does human society change completely but also youth attitudes are substituted by development of technology.
The first reason which should be stated here is that nowadays human society has extraordinary transformation. To begin with, the shape of the works has changed completely, most of the duties that supposed to be done by human before nowadays done by machine or there are agencies that do it for people. Take case of, in past since youths had been recognized as more energetic people had to do most of the house-works, moreover help their neighbors in sweep snow, cut grasses and so on. Today service agencies do these work for people. Or in past decades, most of the youths had to work in military services to protected their country border because they needed a powerful person could deal with hardship of work on arduous conditions which these days easily done by some robots.
Another more subtle point is that due to the tremendous speed of development of technology people needs to work and study most of their time in a day to become compatible with these changes that have occurred. So that, they do not have enough free time to contribute in social activities. Moreover, technology devices, social media has fill their leisure time. On the other hand, by access to the information world, people’s attitude has changed completely. They think since they pay tax, so that, it is the responsible of organizations to help their communities. For example, they expect organization establish some building to protect old people who cannot suffer their daily works by free; because they paid taxes when they had been working in country which in the past had done by younger people in the family.
All in all, young people engagement to helping their communities has descended these days in that societies change, development of technology and shifts in young’s attitude. Who can compare works that people done for their communities many years ago with what they do today? .
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...ey paid taxes when they had been working in country which in the past had done by...
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...many years ago with what they do today? .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, for example, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1973.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03316326531 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69104150495 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52806122449 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0639790861 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.3125 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238363729445 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910027246872 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445713980892 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169646004456 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035628406614 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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