With the development of society and the economy, it is of significance that young people can reflect their opinions on society that is also a unique perspective. A prevalent statement we hear in recent years is that youngsters have a tremendous influence on the future of our society. A considerable number of opponents, however, argue that they only have an immature perspective and their opinion can jeopardize our future of the world. As far as I am concerned, my personal perspective is more aligned with the former view for the two specific reasons and I will develop my opinions in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, young people have a fresh and unique perspective and notice issues that adults or senior citizens miss out. There is a countless number of issues that only teenagers have or struggle with, such as ridiculously expensive college tuition, education system and bullying at school. Teenagers and college students can appeal to the government by causing a protest or conveying serious and vital messages on social media or on the Internet. I have to admit that my opinion is profoundly influenced by my personal experience. When I was a freshman in college, I could not pay tuition all by myself and I had to lend a loan or get scholarships to manage the expensive college tuition. However, there were not adequate financial support from the government and I gathered students who were dealing with the same issue and made a protest and conveyed our voices on social media to more influential people and tried to seek financial helps.This led to a challenging but rewarding experience because I got a sufficient amount of scholarship as a result. Since adults could not notice struggles students or young people are going through, their voices should be reflected in society and they can end up impacting the world considerably.
In addition, they can also look at the presidential campaign or any movement happening in society from a different perspective than adults and verbalize their unique statement on the Internet. The way that the general population look at the occurring issues varies from one generation to another and the voices of any generation are impactful and invaluable. As a case in point, when the presidential campaign was conducted in Japan last year, candidates what adults supported and those young people supported were slightly different. Although senior people did not listen to their opinions at the beginning, they started to support the same person after young people started to show a strong opposition on social media and the Internet by posting their opinions entailing their unique perspectives. This resulted in a beneficial consequnece for both adults and young people because they chose an objectively right person for the president whose well-thought policies were put into effect.
In conclusion, I would like to reiterate my firm belief that young people do have a significant effect on the important decisions that could change the future of society for the two concrete reasons. It is because they have a unique viewpoint that helps them notice current issues that adults are ignorant of and also their perspective on the issue can lead to impactful and beneficial decisions for both senior people and young people.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 73
- It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2748.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09833024119 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85808480244 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465677179963 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.3333333333 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.666666667 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9444444444 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195501960792 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687121490303 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497288127515 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137222922385 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379459378843 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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