Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, language, science, and history.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Forcing Art Education: Boom or Doom?
In the wake of the Double Reduction Policy, a temporal boom for the art education market is coming. With tutoring of academic subjects such as mathematics and English banned by the authorities, extra-curricular activities of art and music swoop in to fill the vacated after-school time of younger children and perhaps also the vanity of their parents. Some people, deceived by the presumably short-lived surge of art zeal, begin to advocate the necessity to treat art and music education as compulsory subjects. However, such an ill-considered move to revolutionize the current education system may do more harm than good.
Clearly, forcing younger school children to study art and music is unwise, because it will break the fragile equity of current education system, which is based mostly on students’ performance on academic subjects that require more diligence than talent or intelligence. Whether it is math, science or a second language, an average elementary student could achieve a desirable grade through hard-working. Admit it or not, there is no need to have an Einstein’s brain to solve a 2nd grade math problem or tell the difference between past tense and present tense. But art education is totally another story, in which students would not only put a lot more effort in practice certain artistic skills but also need a gifted mind. A system that emphasizes on congenital attributes rather than postnatal industry is nothing but medieval and inhumane as it would strike a heavy blow to those who cannot afford the exorbitant tutelage of a professional pianist or painter.
Another fact to wake up those delusional opportunists is that although the new policy seems to wear the mask of reducing the burden of students, it shows no intention to promote art education. If the authorities truly wanted this, they would go further to include art and music into Gaokao, China’s National College Entrance Examination, because they know that no sane parent would invest the child into something that has no ultimate reward. Sadly, the government didn’t do that. Moreover, artists and musicians are awesome, but too many of them are not. An educated workforce keeps a society functional, not untalented artists. And the basic purpose of our modern education system, if not any, is to train productive citizens who can deliver packages, build infrastructures, manufacture cars, etc. If art education were to have the same place as other subjects, who should be responsible for a painter that finds out that he has no gift and no one appreciates his works?
To conclude, it would just be senseless to reshape the system into a gamble for which it would be the ordinary people who pay the price, and also into something that is both unrealistic and unproductive for the society. Nevertheless, the intention here is not to debase the significance of art education or to deny what it deserves. Contrarily, art and music are exactly what we need in a nation with no aesthetic sense, but unfortunately they are not for everyone.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 624, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion system may do more harm than good. Clearly, forcing younger school children...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2578.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10495049505 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91723159391 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574257425743 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 829.8 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.4181810632 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.9 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135837797928 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391081035665 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350817674382 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759364069006 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269752966731 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 624, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion system may do more harm than good. Clearly, forcing younger school children...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2578.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10495049505 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91723159391 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574257425743 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 829.8 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.4181810632 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.9 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135837797928 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391081035665 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350817674382 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759364069006 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269752966731 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.