Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, language, science, and history.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents are always telling their children to stop painting, singing, and lots of other things that aren’t algebra, language, or science. All these parents have a unanimous purpose: make them have a better education. On the superficial side, this may seem beneficent, but it isn’t as parents had thought. There are two reasons why it is important for kids to learn art and music in addition to academic studies.
To begin with, art and music can both inspire creativity in students. In art, people can invent their own style, which is very innovative. Similar to art, music can also make one great works. In many top schools, creativity is very important in art and music. If parents want their students to have a good education, they should make it better for students to show creativity in fields that are taught in school，like art and music.
Another reason is that since about 2015, jobs that provide good salaries are all about “resume classes”. For example, a singer may earn millions of dollars in just a single show. Not only that, he or she will also be famous, and just needs to excel in singing instead of Science, Physics, or Chemistry. If a student chooses to create art for a life, then he or she doesn’t have to excel in other studies other than art. There are other choices of careers.
Opponents of this might say that art and music aren’t as important as algebra and science. They might have a negative influence on children. But a study conducted in 1968 supports the claim that art and music could make a child enjoy life better. On the contrast, math and science might make a child grumpier and less healthy. Also, art and music can let kids find enjoyment.
In conclusion, art and music are just as important as other fields, other than what most people had thought. There are two reasons why it is so: creativity and salaries. So, the next time a parent tells you art and music aren’t important as mathematics, use the reasons above to oppose him or her.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71142857143 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46564807062 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525714285714 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3952352221 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9545454545 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9090909091 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174247786692 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528737196892 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381883542483 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996842884452 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340250539537 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...music in addition to academic studies. To begin with, art and music can both in...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e taught in school，like art and music. Another reason is that since about 2015,...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t. There are other choices of careers. Opponents of this might say that art and...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and music can let kids find enjoyment. In conclusion, art and music are just as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71142857143 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46564807062 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525714285714 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3952352221 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9545454545 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9090909091 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174247786692 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528737196892 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381883542483 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996842884452 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340250539537 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.