Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
An ability of read and write is more important today than in the past.
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Knowledge has become the vital component that build the path to success for people. However, because of the economic abyss throughout the world, most people have no opportunity to improve themselves. Some people believe that nowadays the value of an ability to read and write increased while others disagree with it. From my sight, because of many problems created by the society, people do not really pay much attention to read and write.
To begin with, because the gap between rich and poor increased dramatically nowadays, even though how important the knowledge is, most people prefer to do manual labors instead. Also, those kind of jobs provide people with enough money to live because the expenses must fit with the need of dominant class of the society. This gives the wrong mentality for the public that the life can be smooth with or without knowledge and also leave a negative imitation for the younger generations who completely define the future of the country. As an illustration, one of my cousins never motivate himself to learn while he has many opportunities. When I asked him why, he said his father has no degree of university and can live better than the average, so, why he has to learn boring lessons that have no significant role for his future.
Furthermore, many new careers and majors created by the people that does not require them to write or read such as video maker. Regardless of those give many new opportunities and options for the people, it also give the wrong perspective to them. For example, there are many singers who have no majors in my country and now become a popular among people which turns their life to like royals. Besides, because of the changes in the type of the society, lead people to give the whole chance to their children to do whatever they want. As a result, of course, the children will do things that appeals them, not the tiring and boring study. From my personal experience, I am the lucky one who has a parents always motivate me and push me to beyond limits while my friends hang out everyday without pay any attention to their academics.
All in all, everything of the modern world suggests people to live without knowing the importance of the knowledge which causes the considerable decrease of the value of an abilities to read and write.
- TOEFL TPO 10 - Integrated Writing Task 80
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'those kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; those kinds
...efer to do manual labors instead. Also, those kind of jobs provide people with enough mone...
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Line 3, column 770, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to bore'.
Suggestion: to bore
...an the average, so, why he has to learn boring lessons that have no significant role f...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'gives'?
Suggestion: gives
...ies and options for the people, it also give the wrong perspective to them. For exam...
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Line 5, column 696, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a parent' or simply 'parents'?
Suggestion: a parent; parents
... experience, I am the lucky one who has a parents always motivate me and push me to beyon...
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Line 5, column 780, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...beyond limits while my friends hang out everyday without pay any attention to their acad...
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Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an ability' or simply 'abilities'?
Suggestion: an ability; abilities
...e considerable decrease of the value of an abilities to read and write.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, however, if, really, so, while, as to, for example, kind of, of course, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7855361596 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49041170977 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548628428928 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.6213590517 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.9375 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4375 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122854976088 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444396268902 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520951404386 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.092145463356 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396305866761 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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