Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The younger generations completely define the whole future of the country. There are many rules exist to encourage the young people to find the right path to success. However, many people think that the rules young people have to follow is too strict while others disagree with it. From my point of view, because of many factors, society has no choice other than making the rules strict for the younger people.
To begin with, because of the rapid growth of human population, the rules become stricter than it was in the past in order to maintain the people organized. With the increase of the population, the gap between rich and poor also become broader. As a result, some people are ready to commit suicide because of money, which is the measurement of everything in this world. I think the rules are the only ones that can limit those unpredictable moves of humans. Besides, the number of people would probably decrease when the law has become stricter because they know the hard punishments. As an illustration, according to the speech of a police officer in my country, she believes people now afraid of them and rules which affect to decrease the number of suicides in recent years.
Furthermore, people get the wrong imitation for all the time from the many unreliable resources on the internet. Also, because of that, in any country, the government control the sites and information on the internet that could be seen by the citizens, especially by younger ones. The newer technologies allow the children to addict into many negative things such as video games. Those influence badly on who they are and their mentality. Besides, the movies and the television also has become the advertisement of the suicides in order to get the attention of the public. For example, the news about a girl who commits suicide because of the movie she watched widespread throughout the world about fifty years ago. I think the girl would not do such a thing if society has strict rules back then.
All in all, all the components of modern life suggests to mess up the brain and perspective of people, the rules have to be too strict. Also, the pros of having strict rules considerably outweigh its cons.
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- TOELF TPO 22 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- “When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 57
- Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, however, if, so, then, while, for example, i think, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81794195251 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50997411625 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538258575198 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.623259279 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1052631579 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9473684211 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178675628177 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547693538569 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724396428678 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113140702886 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069305250292 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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