Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives the people were in the past.
The changing proximity of the world is so faster than ever before, therefore it is easy to forget about upsides of the modern society. I admit that there could be some controversies over the topic that whether the present is happier or not to compare with the past. On this topic, I strongly believe that modern society give us better circumstance which we can enjoy our happiness. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, I should say the advance of the medical system and the medication. Even not long time ago, many people died for the lack of medical knowledge. There were a lot of disease had threatened humanity in the old day, but cured recently including Black death, Yellow pox, and so on. This dramatic medical evolution has gave more chanes to survive to human. My personal experience will be valid evidence of it. My grandfather died in a hospital since he had lung cancer. My father, however, has survived from the same ilness which bring my gradfather to death, because medical science has been developed the skill getting rid of cancer cells in my father's body. Without the advance of medication and the medical technology, I could have lost my father.
Secondly, we can be more connected to the world than the past centuries. Transportation technology's progress is astonishing, and it has gave more variety of vehicles including car, airplne, cruise, and so on. It makes us possible that travel world around and make foreign friends, which it was impossible in the past. Moreover, we can share our experiecnes and make friends through the internet. With the advance of both transportation methods and the network technology, we can meet the world more closely and easily. For instance, my father and mother only had a chance to travel to other countries when they are sixty years old. When they were young, they needed a lot of fortune to go abroad. Therefore, traveling world around was only the glorious event for rich people at that time. On the contrary, my generation do not consider travel abroad as demanding experiences because the cost for travel is not cheaper than my parents' age. Additionally, finding and gaining information about the outside of the country is incomparably convinient nowadays.
In conclusion, I suggest that the present world is a lot better than the past. The medcation technoloy has evolved drastically and we have more knowledge and information about this world.
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- TPO 1 3
- TPO 1 Integrated writing 3
- Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. 70
- The following appeared in an e-mail sent by the marketing director of the Classical Shakespeare Theatre of Bardville."Over the past ten years, there has been a 20 percent decline in the size of the average audience at Classical Shakespeare Theatre product 50
- At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 327, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...on. This dramatic medical evolution has gave more chanes to survive to human. My per...
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Line 2, column 478, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...in a hospital since he had lung cancer. My father, however, has survived from the ...
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Line 3, column 136, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...gys progress is astonishing, and it has gave more variety of vehicles including car,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90453460621 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68779166954 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558472553699 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4225573054 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.625 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4583333333 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129297412611 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353897080794 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310981874871 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775307553879 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194162679402 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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