Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.Use specific reasons and examples
In this progressive and sophisticated world, educational matters play a significant role in the lives of human beings since they determine students' success in the future. By considering the importance of education, parents both in the past and nowadays attempt to fulfill this need for their children. While many people hold the opinion that educating children was very arduous nowadays rather than the past because children use the technology. I think nowadays educating matters are very easier than past. The reasons to support my viewpoint is elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, there are numerous superior educational-centers nowadays, which were not available in the past that teach student to use their device in their learning. In some high-ranked schools student are able to use their electronic device such as cell phone and Lap top to learn better. To be more specific, student can search in the Internet to become familiar with more information after they teacher explained in the class. It is evident that they access to numerous practical websites which provide useful information for each level of education. On the other hand, students, who were studying in the past, could not access to these kinds of resources to improve their knowledge.
Moreover, children are more aware about the importance of education in their future rather than past and they have more free. Using some parts of their free time for playing online games, using their cell phones, etc. have not adverse effect on their education. In the past, children were forced by their parents to work in the farm, and they had not adequate time to spend on their homework and projects. Furthermore, some parents should not allowed their children to study. On the contrary, not only parents but also youth are more aware about the importance of education in their future lives. This fact was very dim in the past. As a result, parents are easier than past to encourage their children to continue their study until higher grade.
To wrap it up, having all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I am of the opinion that parents have less difficulty to motivate their children to education. Not only do students use their electronic device as a tool to learn better, but also juvenile are interested in learning rather than past.
- Extra 2- Integrated writing 3
- TPO 36 integrated writing 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.Use specific reasons and examples 68
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours 73
- T P O 53 Integrated Writing Tasks 3
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...uccess in the future. By considering the importance of education, parents both i...
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...t because children use the technology. I think nowadays educating matters are ver...
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...borated in the following paragraphs. To begin with, there are numerous superi...
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...such as cell phone and Lap top to learn better. To be more specific, student can searc...
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...hich provide useful information for each level of education. On the other hand, s...
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...esources to improve their knowledge. Moreover, children are more aware about ...
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...inue their study until higher grade. To wrap it up, having all the aforementi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, while, such as, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0829015544 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65306730811 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50518134715 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4423630124 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198847510394 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699764984965 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04235306258 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125881383104 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357315813326 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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