I uttterly agree with the concept that, the government should invest more on childer in younger age than to support universities. As it is rapidly used in medical fields it is better to prevent from getting sick in first place than to pay for treatment. The government should concider the fact that dedicating more money on children is beneficial for them in long term and that the way children are beeing treated has strong and direct effect on their future personality as well as the fact that our childhood specialy the first five to ten years of out lives are the years that the roots of our innovation and imagination is lying.
First I think that, future should be our core concern and we should plan more for furture than for today. The universities although has strong influence on society's development at the very era but it is the schools and the kindergardens that assure that we even have a future and they are the main reason why the government trys to accommodate every facility for future developments. Additionally the energy and the money should be spend in order to consesus a lifestyle or a alternating a belief on the community and it is much easier to plant the roots instead of changing the direction of the growth of an old tree.
Furthermore, all the psychologist beileve that all the mental and psychological problems and issues that people strugle are the impacts of our early lifestyle and the way we have been treated in our childhood specialy from the age of three to ten. Living conditions in contemporary era is already too hard for people and specialy children and children are constantly being hurt and broke by the pressures on them. The effect of these injuries will be visible on our adualthood which we are witnessing now with the tremendous increasing number of the depression and mental sicknesses in the world. Therefore, more money should be spend on childrens' education and the elementry schools teachers to inform the of the consequences of their actions on childrens' future instead of the fruitless try for training more psychologists to prove this fact for us!
At last the innovation and the imagination of people have strong and indispensable roles on their lives which is rooted on our childhood. The research have shown that the most of the brain develops in our childhood and the more it is used and taken into challenge the more that person's brain will function efficaciously in future. People have different abilities and inteligence but the least we can do is to utilize from all of our abilities. The fastest root for this is to bring out the best from children while we can and before their brains' growth is stopped and it is too late.
In conclusion, I see the obligation and neccessarity of more investments on rearing kids for the benefit of the long time investments that we are making with them. Additionally the prevention and reduction of the psychological issues in future generation and foundation of lucrative aptitute of innovantion are other superior reasons why I believe this way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, while, i think, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83938814532 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80937261002 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455066921606 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 789.3 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.9547519627 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.733333333 100.406767564 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.8666666667 20.6045352989 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255101450143 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829362514731 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057478433099 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141184956737 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691125486358 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 11.7677419355 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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