Our decisions during youth have the most remarkable influence on the rest of our lives and during this period we are about to make the fundamental columns of whatever we will encounter in the future. During these two past decades, the procedure of making decisions has been adjusted by various phenomena and consequently, the decrease of parental control on their children's choices has been its outcome. I must admit that I believe this reduction of the parental authority has brought more prosperity for the new generation rather than the past. The following statements will clarify how this decrease has had such outstanding results.
First of all, the children perceive that the responsible party in their life is no one but them and this comprehension has an astonishing influence on our decision-making approach. For instance, I read a book about choice theory and it stated the development of the human psychology has proven that giving more freedom to our children is the key of their future successes by making them more independent. When they feel that burden of making decisions on their shoulders, they tend to fire their creative mind to discover more valid and solid solutions for their issues. Gradually, they will confront more failures which is eminent for ameliorating and amending their decision-making approach and it will elaborate their self-confidence. Personally, I truly concur the book's statements since I always refuse my parent's excessive collaboration through my life's choices and the quality of my life is totally acceptable for me unlike all the failures and defeats. Therefore, I advocate the concept of self-reliance and its consequences.
Another compelling reason comes into the consideration is that parents are able to nurture their personal life instead of being held by all their children's responsibilities and as the result, their satisfaction and delight of being successful would have a terrific impact on their family. For instance, my mother decided to continue her education in university when I turned to seventeen; she has spent more time for her personal growth instead of being engaged in all of my decisions. I could feel her profound satisfaction about herself and it that makes me content as well despite the fact that I was more responsible for my individual life. That decision gave me more field to play and I can declare that freedom turned me into a self-confident person.
To wrap it up, I can say the development of creative mind which has a huge impact to attain prosperity and it is a consequence of being self-determining as a young person. I recommend, all parents set free themselves from their children's choices and spend that freedom for their personal ambitions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17528089888 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04607052416 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510112359551 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.8829781215 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.9375 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8125 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260437114343 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884594076799 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543158566764 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157192633099 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427470496203 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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