Our decisions during youth have the most remarkable influence on the rest of our lives and during this period we are about to make the fundamental columns of whatever we will encounter in future. During these two past decades, the procedure of making decisions has been adjusted by various phenomena and consequently, the decrease of parental control on their children's choices has been its outcome. There are growing segment of people who believe this reduction of the parental authority has brought more prosperity for the new generation. However, the objections cannot get omitted as they declare that the amount of our juveniles' failures has risen. Admittedly, I advocate the concept of self-reliance and its paramount consequences. The ensuing paragraphs the rationale behind this opinion will be elaborate.
First and for most, the independence has led the offspring to perceive that the responsible party in their life is no one but them and this comprehension has an astonishing influence on our decision-making approach. For instance, I read a book about choice theory and it stated the development of the human psychology has approved that giving more freedom to our children is the key of their future successes by making them more independent. When they feel the burden of making decisions on their shoulders, they tend to fire their creative mind to discover more valid and solid solutions for their issues. It is not far-fetched that they confront more failures but those are eminent for ameliorating and amending their decision-making approach and it will elaborate their self-confidence. Personally, I truly concur the book's statements since I always refuse my parent's excessive collaboration through my life's choices and the quality of my life is totally satisfying for me unlike all the defeats so I advocate the concept of self-reliance and its consequences.
Another compelling reason comes into the consideration is that parents are able to nurture their personal life instead of being held by all their children's responsibilities and as the result, their satisfaction and delight of being successful would have a terrific impact on their youngsters. For instance, my mother decided to continue her education in university when I turned to seventeen; she has spent more time for her personal growth instead of being engaged in all of my decisions. I could feel her profound satisfaction and fulfillment about herself and that had made me content as well despite the fact that I was more responsible for my individual life. That decision gave me more field to play and I can declare that freedom turned me into a self-confident person.
To wrap it up, I can say the development of creative mind which has a huge impact to attain prosperity and it is a consequence of being self-determining as a young person. I recommend, all parents set free themselves from their children's choices and spend that freedom for their personal ambitions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, so, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2496.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2108559499 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09352167467 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509394572025 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 778.5 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.0209627882 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.823529412 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1764705882 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58823529412 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253543217206 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804517552219 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618545998275 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149112890206 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491387916394 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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