Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.

It was hard to imagine that in the ancient China, the new couple woud not know who is their husband or wife until the night after their wedding ceremony. Their parents in an the past almost made every decision for their sons or daughters. Due to the development of modern society, many of these phenomenons were abandoned as a symbol of modernizaion in the country. Thus, as my concern, the young people today can make more decisions about their own lives than before. I will address my views as follows.

To begin with, the times are evolving, so does these cultures. In many conutries, people making most decisions for their sons and daughters was the culture of the past. Besides the marrigement, there are lots of other decisions made by the parents.In the medi-eval Europe, the father of the family would determine which son should wield the swords as well as which son should read books. Like the TV series Game of the Thrones, there were 7 sons and daughters of Ned Starks ,they were certain to hav different lives due to the arrangements of their father. So this TV series developed with the lives of them. They had no choice because their father aksed them to do so.

In addtion, the times are evolving, with the rapid development of the whole world. Young people today can get more information faster than their parents does due to the booming technology. My grandfather did not have TV when he was young, My father did not surf the Internet when he was young, also, I did not have the Instagram, the mobile socializinfg application, when I was young. So the the young people today live in an information technology society which they could get the knowledge more esasily and quickly, the books they are learing are deeper than we had. When I had a look of my nephew's math book in the 12 grade, I found the course of calculation which I learned at University. They are determined to learn more than we did at the same age. So they could be more mature than we were. Also, the generation after the young people at this time would learn more that they do now. No one could stop the development of the world.

Finally, I believe that the parents make less decisions than them in the past. While it does not mean that the young people would live on their own beacuase they can make all the decisions. Our parents arr still the good teachers and friends of us. They can offer us some important directions about life,that' sthe secret of my happy life with my wife.Because after I introduced my girlfriend to my parents, they said, she was the one I should marry. This is the one of most significant advices from my parents. I l love all of them so much.

In conclusion, I belive due to the development of the world , the young people can make more decisions about their lives than in the past, it a symbol of the times progress.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, if, look, so, still, thus, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2331.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54385964912 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45365296554 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465886939571 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 712.8 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5726381945 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3333333333 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85185185185 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313550508201 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966319790522 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106003655624 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21865568815 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652635091562 0.0645574589148 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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