Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The world we live in has changed dramatically, so has the entertainment industry. With the development of new technology, movies and televisions have become more vivid and appealing. Nevertheless, views differ considerably when it comes to the issue of whether movies and televisions do more harm than good to young people's behavior. based on my personal experience and actual observation of life, I believe that movies and shows are conducive to the young.
First and foremost, movies and televisions help people relax. Never in history have human beings been as busy as we are today. Nowadays young people have been overwhelmed by their studies, work and life issues. Under this circumstance, it is a real luxury for the young to spare a few days traveling around. moreover, the tiredness from the trip also takes a great amount of time to be fully recovered. In contrast, watching a great show lying on the sofa is a great way to relax. moreover, watching movies together with friends is also a great way of relaxation. The fascinating story and the stirring scene provides a perfect getaway for one to escape his normal life for a short period of time.
Another reason that drives me to indicate such an opinion is that by watching videos, people learn lessons about life. there are many informative good shows available that will expand the young's horizon and encourage them to think deeply. The tv show "Black Mirror", which is about how technology will greatly influence our daily life, is one such show. it provides many unexpected perspectives about what the future life will be like. Every time I watch it, not only I will be shocked at how amazing the story is developed, but also exchange with my friends about the lesson I learn from the show, such as how bad social platforms can do to our life.
Admittedly, there are some bad shows. However, we can all negate all the positive sides of the movies and tv based on a few bad examples. By setting up a higher threshold for the movie industry and promoting the good ones, movies and tv will bring more benefits to young people.
based on what I have mentioned above, I should reinforce my perspective that movies and television can bring more positive effects than negative impacts on the young,
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time.Which of these situations do you think is better? 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88174807198 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67205071251 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547557840617 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2120232383 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4285714286 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5238095238 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0949400213916 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.028412166508 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292580568987 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0452771029756 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460985169491 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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