do you agree or disagree with the following statement?it is more important for government to spend more money to improve internet access than to improve public transportation?use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
it is more important for government to spend more money to improve internet access than to improve public transportation?
use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In one or two predecessor decade, internet and public transportation have had the most important role in people’s life. It has been always one of the most argumentative problems between governments and people whether should receive more attention, internet or public transportation? Both of them have some advantages and disadvantages. Some people think government should dedicate more investment in one of them, because they think its advantages overweight its disadvantages. Nowadays internet can result to a decrease in traffic and as a result a decrease in air pollution and violence in society. I am of the opinion saying government should spend budget for internet extension. In what follows, I will cogently delve into my conspicuous reason to prove my stand point.

Firstly, the most important reason which is noteworthy being taken an account meticulously is that today one of the most concerning problem among environmental scientist is the air pollution caused by various gasses released by cars due to combustion fossil fuels in the metropolitan cities. Using internet diminish air pollution. For instance two days ago I need to go to the bank rapidly. But I didn’t access to public transportation, beside I couldn’t use my car, because traffic was very heavy. I called to bank stuff and he said I could do my business online. So didn’t go the bank. It means I didn’t use car. Consider a lot of people can do their work same as me. Traffic decrease. Combustion fossil fuels decrease and as a result air pollution eliminate.

Secondly, another pivotal reason which is worth being explained is that internet can provide a lot of employment opportunities. As it is clear, starting a job demand a lot of money and most of unemployment people are lack of money. So they will not be able to start a job. Today a lot of people have their own online market. For example consider a man who wants sell fast food. But he doesn’t have money for renting a shop or buying equipment but he can have is own shop in internet, advertise there and cook in his own house and make money. Beside the person who delivers the food can be beneficiary.

To wrap it up, contemplation aforementioned reasons above, one can effortlessly conclude that by improving internet air pollution will decrease .<span class="hiddenSuggestion" pre="decrease "></span> when traffic decrease, it contributes to a decrease in violence in society and preventing people from getting bored and being more efficient at work. Apart this a lot of employment opportunities will be created.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: decades
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19194312796 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.47719808732 2.67179642975 130% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53317535545 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 79.0219054343 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.64 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.88 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173168455097 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432719429039 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412879930113 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996487660417 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367272273899 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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