Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Most people believe that movies and television have a profound effect on human society. In my opinion, TV and movies do harm to young people because they are bad for kid's health and the violence in the TV may influence small children. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, TV and movies are bad for young people's health, espeacially the health of eyes. Children are easy to be addicted to TV and they could spend many hours on watching TV because the shows or videos on TV are pretty interesting. When young people are watching TV, they just stare on TV without moving their eyes. This could make eyes of young people extremely tired, and young people do not know to relax their eyes. At last, their eyes will suffer illnesses. For example, my litter cousin named Tom likes watching TV at the extreme. He could stay at home and watch TV for even ten hours one day. When he is eating, his eyes do not move from TV. Eventually, he feels his eyes uncomfortable and he is pretty afraid of light. He has to go to hosptial and has a treatment.
Secondly, the fact that the violent shows on TV could have a negative impact on young children indicates TV does harm to young people. Young people have no ability to check what is right and what is wrong and it's easy for young people to imitate what they see. Therefore, if kids see something violent on TV, they might imitate it and hurt their friends. The example of a piece of news demonstrates this notion. Several children love to watch a cartoon named Goat and Wolf. In the cartoon, the wolf usually boils the goat. Therefore, these children caught one friend named Mike and burned fires to boil water. They were going to boil Mike like the cartoon. It's lucky that their parents found it and stopped their dangerous behaviors or Mike might die due to the imitation of the cartoon. The example shows that TV could cause quite dangerous behaviors of children.
In conclusion, TV is bad for young people because it is harmful to the health of young people and the violent behaviors could have negative influence on kids.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55989583333 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29352286332 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471354166667 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6458020144 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9583333333 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70833333333 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142559803143 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455706021228 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588141738663 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120664144062 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518621933914 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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