personally, i would agree with that above mentioned statement that playing computer games wast of and we should not allow them to play them. there several reason why i want children not to play the video games. this video games programme cause so many problems like health, physical strain , mental stress, less concentration in their study and the home work.
first of all, because of children more encouraged with playing video games this leads them to end up with some kind health disorder like eye pain, at very early stage using eye glasses or spectacles. the recent research says that now a days children facing the headache and eye site problems due to long time use video games. this problems became unpreventable now a days.moreover doctor suggests that parents has to discourage the children activities like video games.
secondly, due to prolong exposure to that uv rays that rays causing the some chemical changes in the body and it make them mentally very stressful. because when the not expose to natural sun light for sufficient time that causes the reduction melanin in the blood this pigment is very important for the energetics. so when the reduction in the pigment due to the reduction in the expose to natural sun light, it leads to mental depression to children.
thirdly, lack concentration in their study, because they keep on playing the video games more than 6 hours a day that causes the lack motivation,interest and poor in their performance. some articles says that lot of children now a encourage in the playing video games that leads them less productivity.
finally, even though when there is some advantages in playing the video games like improving their creativity still the the disadvantages of video games dominate the advantages.
in my opinion even some sort of advantages of playing the video games there like improving creativity, this advantages are very very less when compare with it's disadvantages like the health issues, mental stress and the less productivity. so i strongly say that playing video games should be avoided.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.295212765957 0.229887763892 128% => OK
Verbs: 0.119680851064 0.158761421928 75% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0824468085106 0.0866891130778 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0664893617021 0.046263068375 144% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0398936170213 0.0685040099705 58% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114361702128 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.031914893617 0.0351676179071 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.73218082501 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.031914893617 0.0309702414327 103% => OK
Particles: 0.00265957446809 0.00188951952338 141% => OK
Determiners: 0.11170212766 0.0887237588012 126% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00797872340426 0.0209618222197 38% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0212765957447 0.0139019557991 153% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2118.0 2387.08602151 89% => OK
No of words: 344.0 408.028673835 84% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15697674419 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.322674418605 0.338922669872 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.252906976744 0.251872472559 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.177325581395 0.174417080927 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110465116279 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73218082501 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485465116279 0.524397521467 93% => OK
Word variations: 50.0692538548 59.2087087015 85% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6684587814 68% => OK
Sentence length: 24.5714285714 20.5533526081 120% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1682774703 48.84282405 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.285714286 120.699889404 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 20.5533526081 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 46.0 5.54480286738 830% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.8621262458 45.7405998639 109% => OK
Elegance: 1.95294117647 1.45489161554 134% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316499239086 0.300154397459 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.185185891141 0.103427244359 179% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.149366095746 0.0752933317313 198% => Ideas in sentences are similar.
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.675430884919 0.497263757937 136% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.160433437453 0.151897553556 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151986919074 0.114077575197 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657713968798 0.0781384742642 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.35262121336 0.336927656856 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0953681544498 0.067059652881 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196420206201 0.210909579961 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680295695221 0.0618886996521 110% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
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Rates: 73 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 22 Out of 30