Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that living in modern world is so complicated, it forces people to work so hard and try to do so many things as possible. However, the question is that the new living approach have been able to brought success and happiness for humankind. Contrary, to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that people who full in their time to learning more and more new skills in different fields would be more successful person in the future. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that because people are busy to doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
First and foremost, some people are overwhelm and helpless to overcoming their huge tasks. For example, today most parents force their children to contribute in the variety of extra school classes, such as music, painting, singing, computer class and etc. They believe that schools programs are not advance enough to appropriately prepare children for a successful future life. Nonetheless, these parents never ask children about their real interests. Children unwillingly follow parents' interests, but most of them fail on doing all those tasks. It not only discourages children from all those activities, but also creates depression and anxiety on them.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that people who work so hard with the hope of exceptional wealth lost a lot of more important aspects of life. people who do not spend adequate time with their family usually do not have a happy personal life. It is more likely to get divorce or have children with serious issues. Human capability is limited, and if people do not assign enough time to each part, simply will lost them. In addition, the first aim for hard working is providing facilities for a more comfortable life, not sacrificing life for work.
Finally, yet importantly, some people believe that involving in the wide variety of portions will be helpful to avoid from bored. Although preventing from routine living is important, but people can prevent it just by following some simple rules, for example, using different transportation vehicles or different routes, going to gym or practice something that they really enjoy.
On the basis of the reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. It is because human effort is limited and busy people are sacrificing many important part of their life, and because we can have a happy life just by following some simple rules.
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 73
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 70
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 70
- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. 75
- one of the best ways that parents can help their children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 572, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...hat because people are busy to doing so many different things, they do very few things well. ...
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Line 3, column 37, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'overwhelmed'.
Suggestion: overwhelmed
... First and foremost, some people are overwhelm and helpless to overcoming their huge t...
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Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...usic, painting, singing, computer class and etc. They believe that schools programs are ...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
... lot of more important aspects of life. people who do not spend adequate time with th...
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Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ople who do not spend adequate time with their family usually do not have a happy...
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Line 5, column 446, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
...n enough time to each part, simply will lost them. In addition, the first aim for ha...
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Line 9, column 109, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...d that because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, nonetheless, really, so, still, well, for example, in addition, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2169.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02083333333 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56526499425 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1768454899 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.157894737 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7368421053 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327543638048 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110461583058 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161294596054 0.0737576698707 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200680320133 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142040382778 0.0645574589148 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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