Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Celebrities have always been the subject of any discussion since being famous brings about a great number of advantages to appeal people' attentions. With this in mind, some people believe that teenagers are more interested in famous people's attitudes and their life styles rather than anyone else, while others think about this concept in a different manner. Personally, I strongly agree that viewpoints of celebrities are more attractive to younger people for quiet a few reasons which are as follow.
First of all, famous people attract people's attention due to their distinctive tastes and opinions. By this I mean, their fans advocate and support them to indicate their fund. Consistent with this idea, never are such well-known people alone, since there are always many to love them and their options to find friends will be broad enough. One study for instance, shows that celebrities who hold various concerts all around the world or athletes who practice and participate in several champions every year, are more sociable and can make many more friends than common people, since they have many supporters who keep their company because of their beliefs or life styles. Hence, young people eager to know about them and follow their perspectives.
Apart from the fact mentioned above, another equally momentous point is that, teenagers take into account that celebrities possess wealth and great social status which are appealing goals for young people. What I mean is, juvenile would like to make familiar with famous people's attitudes and beliefs in any aspect of life and imitate them in order to become as successful and prosperous as celebrities. In this case, young people can set the athletes or other celebrities as their role models to learn from their beliefs toward success and wealth. Besides, teenagers can get informed about the amount of famous people's attempts and perseverance for achieving their prominent ends at their majors. To illuminate this point, I would like to provide a quote from a famous athlete, Mohammad Ali Kelly, who said, we do not fight just for our own goals, we fight for whom support us, especially for whom we are their role models, which indicates the role of celebrities and their view points on teenagers' lives rather than elders’.
In conclusion, according to the aforementioned reasons, I firmly hold this opinion that celebrities' view points are much more significant for young people. Since, not only do they attract a great amount of attention from their fans, but they also will be examples to teenagers to become prosperous.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different manner" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
..., while others think about this concept in a different manner. Personally, I strongly agree that view...
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Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
...eople for quiet a few reasons which are as follow. First of all, famous people attract p...
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Line 2, column 204, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are never
... their fund. Consistent with this idea, never are such well-known people alone, since the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, so, well, while, apart from, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14454976303 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54571310175 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542654028436 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.2313500708 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.733333333 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1333333333 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182749424041 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707864061035 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386179578225 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127255760808 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326992279162 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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