Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I personally agree with the statement that youth value opinions of celebrities to a higher degree than older people do. There are a few reasons why I hold this opinion.
First of all, young people tend to emulate celebrities. When people are young, they attracted by celebrities` lifestyle, and they want to be as rich and famous as the celebrities. Therefore, youth think that if celebrities were able to become famous, their opinions and beliefs are the right ones and should be followed. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a teenager, I wanted to become a popular singer, and because of that I watched a lot of videos and read a myriad of interviews with successful artists. I thought that they were always right since they could such great results in their career. When I grew up, I learned that most of the celebrities are not educated people and their opinion very often misleading but I did not realize it when I was young. To that end, Young individuals admire celebrities and because of that prone to follow their points of view.
Second, young people value opinions of famous individuals because they see and listen to them sometimes more often than they communicate with their own parents. Nowadays, people live very busy lives. Parents often are overwhelmed with all responsibilities they have in front of their families and employers. Because of that, Adults with children tend to concentrate on the process of making money to support their families, and completely forget to spent time with their children and talk to them about life. In this case, the children have no choice but to listen to someone else`s opinions and believes, so they watch TV and listen to the celebrities and learn from them. For instance, when in my childhood, my parents worked too hard and did not have time on conversations with me about important things in life, I learned about this things from opinions of famous people I saw on TV. This example illustrates why young people are affected by opinions of celebrities.
To conclude, I believe that for people, who are not mature yet, points of view of renowned people seem significant. This is because young people want to live like celebrities do and because their parents do not devote enough time to them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 837, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...portant things in life, I learned about this things from opinions of famous people I...
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Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ents do not devote enough time to them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1901.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84948979592 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7318736886 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484693877551 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5738068628 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.052631579 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6315789474 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245577925313 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833622129951 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059168561362 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166988749539 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635857795625 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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