Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Each individuals has a role model, some will extol them and some do their best efforts to live like them. Some people thinks that the way of living and thinking of celebrities will have a strong impacts on juveniles than elderlies. On the other hand some people conced with this idea. In my opinion, celebrities such as famours actors, athletes will have a greater influence on younger people than older ones which i will discribe them hereunder.
Juvenilies due to their age and their inclinations have a role model namely famous actors, footbalist, models. The way this celebs act and think will impact younger people. For instance, when I was a teanager, my role model was emily lee, the singer of a group, so i tried to act like her. If she donated money I wanted to contribute in charity works too. If she dressed a special brand I was the one who would be buying that special brand too. So as can be infernce, my atitudes was a mimic and imitation of what my role model did.
Having great amount of experiance, seeing so many peoples life, and being involved more in social tasks, gives the elderlies the benifit of making the descion based on what they think is right. By using the preception they have and also, the mind opening knoweldge they have, older people will not be influnced by famous celebs. For example, at the time i was acting like Emily Lee, would do; My father had a great willing for an other singer but he did his tasks as she did; And also, his opinions were formed due to his experience, not based on some ones action and behavior.
Utterly, juvenelies are still at the age that they try so many ways to find their own way of living and thinking, so as far as I am concerned, I believe that discovering new paths is compulsory for finding your own unique one. And this happens only when you are young and have the passion to find the right one.
All in all, I believe that each person will experaincing a time when he/she imitate or at least gets the idea from another person like a scientific, actor, entertanier. And also, it's a way for paving the way when you are in charge of finding the right way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
Each individuals has a role model, some will...
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Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
Each individuals has a role model, some will extol them and ...
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Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'impact'?
Suggestion: impact
...nking of celebrities will have a strong impacts on juveniles than elderlies. On the oth...
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Line 1, column 416, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...on younger people than older ones which i will discribe them hereunder. Juvenili...
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Line 2, column 265, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...as emily lee, the singer of a group, so i tried to act like her. If she donated m...
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Line 2, column 290, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of a group, so i tried to act like her. If she donated money I wanted to contribut...
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Line 2, column 356, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ted to contribute in charity works too. If she dressed a special brand I was the o...
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Line 3, column 354, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...famous celebs. For example, at the time i was acting like Emily Lee, would do; My...
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Line 3, column 427, Rule ID: AN_OTHER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'another'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: another
...d do; My father had a great willing for an other singer but he did his tasks as she did;...
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Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'imitates'.
Suggestion: imitates
...on will experaincing a time when he/she imitate or at least gets the idea from another ...
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Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ientific, actor, entertanier. And also, its a way for paving the way when you are i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, at least, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1746.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46547314578 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35599990225 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531969309463 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7493153247 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.705882353 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128336429536 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447171758348 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471724369689 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0668054654976 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505659171812 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.