Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Each has a role model, some will extol them, and some make their best efforts to live like them. Some people think that the way of living and thinking of celebrities will have a substantial impact on juveniles than elderlies. On the other hand, some people concede with this idea. In my opinion, celebrities such as famous actors, athletes will have a more significant influence on younger people than older ones which I will describe them hereunder.
Juveniles due to their age and their inclinations have a role model namely famous actors, football player, models. The way this celeb act and think will impact younger people. For instance, when I was a teenager, my role model was Emily Lee, the singer of a group, so I tried to act like her. If she donated money, I wanted to contribute to charity works too. If she dressed a particular brand, I was the one who would be buying that unique brand also. So as can be inference, my attitudes was a mimic and imitation of what my role model did.
Having the vast amount of experience, seeing so many peoples life, and being involved more in social tasks, gives the elderlies the benefit of making the decision based on what they think is right. By using the preception they have and also, the mind-opening knowledge they have, older people will not be influenced by famous celebs. For example, at the time I was acting like Emily Lee, would do; My father had an excellent willing for the other singer, but he did his tasks as she did; And also, his opinions were formed due to his experience, not based on some one's action and behavior.
Utterly, juveniles are still at the age that they try so many ways to find their way of living and thinking, so as far as I am concerned, I believe that discovering new paths is compulsory for finding your unique one. And this happens only when you are young and have the passion for finding the right one.
All in all, I believe that each person will experience a time when he/she imitate or at least gets the idea from another person like a scientific, actor, entertainer. And also, it's a way for paving the way when you are in charge of finding the right direction.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 447, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...e who would be buying that unique brand also. So as can be inference, my attitudes w...
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Line 5, column 75, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'imitates'.
Suggestion: imitates
...rson will experience a time when he/she imitate or at least gets the idea from another ...
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Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ientific, actor, entertainer. And also, its a way for paving the way when you are i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, at least, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54358974359 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41436638127 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525641025641 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7495015262 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.235294118 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9411764706 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132114104163 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468506521309 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057607796768 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.070124081168 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547571954099 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.