Celebrities have an influential and tremendous impact on children lives. Children are easily crash on singer and actor and think them as their role models. When comes to this statement, some people may agree with this idea and give us sound reasons for their belief. On the others hand, some people might disagree with this idea and have different opinions. Also those opponent probably will provide us with puissant evidence to support their thoughts. I am strongly agree with the statement and believe celebrities opinion easily influence on children than older people, the reasons go as follows.
To begin with, celebrities have an incontrovertible affect on children lives. Compared to adults, young people pay more attention on celebrities and entertainers.In fact, due to the revolutionary impact on new technology that has a spectacular breakthrough in many sphere in our communities, such as smartphones and tablets, that sometimes lead our children easily get in touch with celebrities. For example, I like to watching in Youtube video to follow the celebrities lifestyles, what they like to eat and wear and purchased the items they had, in contrary, my parents do not affected by these celebrities, they only watching the daily news on television.
Secondly, in the period of human's growth, their capability of independence and critical thinking are still immature so young people are vulnerable to negative way and tempt to imitate who the are admired. In the other way, older people who are already in their forties and fifties, are able to control themselves form being influence by the celebrities because their experienced are enough to judging the correctness from different voice.Moreover, many studied which have been done by universities in United States constantly stated that young people are easily influenced by the celebrities' opinions, and many studied was studying this subject. Finally, scholar prove this examination, this experiences taught me to believe older people not easily to influenced by celebrities opinions.
For all have been discussed may finally draw a conclusion that says celebrities have more influenced toward young people. So, famous people should be careful what they are saying in public. This action will improve our social lives. Other people opinions have right to believe. But my opinions and other people are overwhelmingly to much to be ignored.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
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Suggestion: agreed
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Suggestion: effect
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun sphere seems to be countable; consider using: 'many spheres'.
Suggestion: many spheres
... that has a spectacular breakthrough in many sphere in our communities, such as smartphones...
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...ons and other people are overwhelmingly to much to be ignored.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for example, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36147757256 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91378902061 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554089709763 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 104.789358661 48.9658058833 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 119.529411765 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209199257455 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697700224914 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568542010657 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12692072462 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559699752218 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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