Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
workers are a crucial part of our society. All works that do everywhere need a lot of employees who have different ability in order to go on industry effectively. Some people believe that it is better that workers do many various types of task at the same time during the workday, while others hold an opposit view. In my view, every employee should be allocated for one task all day long for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that worker should focus on one task if they want to do their job well. every person has limited ability to concentrate on one job because of their brain. brain may make mistake seriously when people do several task exceedingly. Therefore, employee should prevent to do their task simultaneously so as not to make mistake. For example, when I was in high school, I had to work at grocery store beside my studying due to the fact my family could not afford my expense. when I went to school, I was so sleepy because I had worked last night at store. this event hurt me to pass my courses that face me with severe problems. Obviously, when I worked at store after my school, I was preoccupation about how to manage my exams. Consequently, I did not do my job well that lead my manager to fire me. this experience teach me that I should focus on my study only if I want to progress quickly.
Another reason is that doing several jobs create problem for worker to mange their time that cause to harm not only them but also their administer. time is vital factor to do anything but when people face shortage of it, they maybe put under pressure. this really can hurt to their health and also damage others catastrophically. As a result, manager should avoid this situation by allocating one worker to one job. For example, my father had a big shoe company about ten years ago. he confronted severe issue because of oscillating economic condition. he had to force his worker to do two works during the workday in order to compensate this unbalancing expenses. As over time, this solution cause all people who worked as worker at his company to become ill. Unfortunately, although other worker who did not be effected by this pressure, they made bad mistake that lead my father to become bankrupt. As you can see, individuals can not manage several tasks well and hurt others.
In conclusion, I personality believe that doing one task is more beneficial that working in several jobs. Not only it help worker concentrate better, but also they can mange time. All administers should help their employee by allocating one job to them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Workers
workers are a crucial part of our society. All ...
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...task if they want to do their job well. every person has limited ability to concentra...
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Suggestion: Brain
...rate on one job because of their brain. brain may make mistake seriously when people ...
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Suggestion: several tasks
...y make mistake seriously when people do several task exceedingly. Therefore, employee should...
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... my family could not afford my expense. when I went to school, I was so sleepy becau...
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...cause I had worked last night at store. this event hurt me to pass my courses that f...
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Suggestion: Time
...ot only them but also their administer. time is vital factor to do anything but when...
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...e of it, they maybe put under pressure. this really can hurt to their health and als...
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Suggestion: He
...ause of oscillating economic condition. he had to force his worker to do two works...
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Suggestion:
...compensate this unbalancing expenses. As over time, this solution cause all peopl...
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Suggestion: helps
...at working in several jobs. Not only it help worker concentrate better, but also the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, really, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65131578947 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58041546559 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8162983015 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.5555555556 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8888888889 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48148148148 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0680917763674 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0228793481823 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0256050984075 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0475972921832 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0086133762929 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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