Nowadays, improving the community is condidered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Living at well educated society helps us to enjoy every single moment at the future. I am sure that some people would agree that young youth have enough time to help their communities, while others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that children do not have extra time to be volunteer to help the commuinty in different fields. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, young people struggling with many activities all day long. Recently, people are living in a very dynamic world and they are working a lot of hours everyday. For instance, my son is a students at medical school and he has a lot of tasks to do daily. Last summer, the univerisity asked for voulnteers to help the young children in the city to practice excercise. In fact, the college could not enogh students to implant this project. This is because students are some busy with many assignments and exams. In addition, students have to study a lot of hours everyday to submit their paper works on time. Moreover, they have to focus on their attendence at lectures in order to get high score by the end of the year. So, my son told me that the university cancelled the project. On the other hand, if students did not have all of these tremendous work, they could have chance to join this project and help other young children. As you can see, youth are so busy with their educational life style and they do not have enough time to help their communities.
In addition, some young people are not mature enough and they are not caring about their society. young people are looking for spending time with other friends specially in the young age. For example, my little daughter is in elementary school and she always have a lot of friends. Last week, I asked her to help me to clean the area around our house to plant colorful flowers. In fact, she refutes to join me and she preferred to join her friends to play in the back yard. Furthermore, she feels that this is not one of her responsibility to do anything to protect the environment. Consequently, I believe that when she gets older, she will have the same spirit and the same mentality. So, I strongly agree that the school should encourge students to support their societies and improve the nature around them. This experience taught me that children are not mature to help their countries.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree that young people have plenty of time to help their communities. This is because many students are so busy with many issues and they have a lot of tasks to do, and because some young children are not mature enough to support the community. So, we have to increase their awareness to have positive impact on the whole world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 163, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...rld and they are working a lot of hours everyday. For instance, my son is a students at ...
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Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...hours everyday. For instance, my son is a students at medical school and he has a lot of t...
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Line 3, column 571, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
..., students have to study a lot of hours everyday to submit their paper works on time. Mo...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Young
...hey are not caring about their society. young people are looking for spending time wi...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
... is in elementary school and she always have a lot of friends. Last week, I asked he...
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Line 5, column 789, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding nature'?
Suggestion: the surrounding nature
... to support their societies and improve the nature around them. This experience taught me that childre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, on the whole, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2351.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62795275591 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46689517332 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454724409449 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.098454095 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.9642857143 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82142857143 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269464600443 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765784418354 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781990184283 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190511174856 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275399860731 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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