Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not toward enough time to help their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this age of information and technological advances people's attentions are towards more for their themselves rather than other people. consequently, most people prefer their own good and necessities. Personally, i believe that today's young people spent less time for their family and nations. I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explain in the following essay.
First of all, due to influences from the world through technological advances such as internet, most young people have huge goals and therefore, they don't have enough time for other people. Usually all people have role models and imitate the people who achieved higher goals, and because of this, young people have dream about just becoming same as their role models, which can be anyone, but mostly people who have achieved worldwide status. As a result, nowadays most young people are busy helping their parents. my own experience is a compelling example of this. I'm the only son of my parents who run family business. Ever since i was a kid. i've always had a goal of becoming an astronomer. In turn, my dream became to study abroad where space programe is huge because there is no space program in my country. so i set only one thing in my mind that i should pay attention to my studies only and ignore everything. consequently, i didn't help that much to my parents when they run the family business by themselves. Of course, it is duty for parents for suppor their children's education, but in my case, i even ignored household chores. Now as an adult, i always regret my attitude towards my parents during my school years.
Secondly, nowadays most young people have no national identities. As the globalization is more progressing, most young people's mind, at least in my country, is on going abroad and leaving their countries behind. As a result, there is shortage of working people in my country. For instance, in my company, we have faced the problem of unable to finding enough workers, and i've heard the same thing from all the other companies and working places. this is because most of young people have gone abroad. As statics have shown that the outgoing movement is rising that has never been recorded before. I think it is all true as seen from my own acquintances that all of my classmates from my high school has gone abroad. so the globalization has affected my country dramatically.
In conclusion, i strongly believe that there is tendency of young people having no enough time and care for their communities. this is because due to the worldwide connections young people are mostly busy because of their huge goals and they have no national pride.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, of course, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83700440529 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62729907341 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486784140969 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.9869805535 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4615384615 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4615384615 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149781067927 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538925261996 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562605746294 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119858868426 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031294351694 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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