Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Since the dawn of civilization and industrialization, governments have played a pivotal role in people's life. Their decisions and budget allocations affect many aspects of life, including education or healthcare system. The question which arises here is whether governments use and rely on youth talents in their measures or not. I, personally, assert that governments are not using these talent and intelligent minds in crucial decisions of society. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first remarkable reason to be mentioned is that as young people are not enough experienced, governments think that they might cause severe problems for the country. Youngs, especially the ones who recently graduated from university, has not been in the real world and do not have the knowledge to cope with issues. As a result, they might take some emotional decisions which be harmful to society. For instance, in my country, we had a very young environment minister. He could not take wise decisions at all, by the end of his responsibilities, we had several environmental problems, including cutting the forests leading to drought, having air pollution. Had he experiences, we would not have faced with these problems.
The other equally important point is that nowadays, most of the young population are reluctant to contribute to these problems. They are more engages in their entertainment activities such as swimming and other sports. Moreover, as families were not successful in nurturing helpful member for society, children lack critical thinking ability, so they do not involve themselves in these eras. In other words, parents raise bookish and studious ones who could not handle and cope with hard situations. They could not even tackle their stress levels or accepting their mistakes. Thus, young are not mentally ready to be involved in vital decisions of society.
In conclusion, administers are not utilizing young people in decision making due to the fact that they may have not the excellent performance and take detrimental decisions. It is highly recommended that governments support on children from childhood to reinforce the needed abilities so that young can participate in important decisions which undoubtedly could help them get better results since they have a fresh mind.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 384, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this talent' or 'these talents'?
Suggestion: this talent; these talents
..., assert that governments are not using these talent and intelligent minds in crucial decisi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3397260274 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97530210119 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58904109589 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.261077329 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.578947368 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2105263158 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163704206986 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492798332065 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358966995084 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10162749825 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355062915496 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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