Do you agree or disagree with the following?
Young people enjoy life more than older people do
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words do not use memorized examples
It is not appropriate to say that young people enjoy life more than older people do because no matter what age a person can be, they enjoy life to fullest and the way of enjoyment can change but the level of enjoyment remains the same for young and the older generation. However, young people are more physically fit and more energetic so i would support the younger generation being enjoyable more than the older people.
Firstly, young people are more physically capable of enjoying. By going on adventures such as hiking, cliff diving, bungee jumping etc Reason being is that their age plays an important part in doing so. For example; not too long ago, i went to see the waterfall that is not an actual water fall from the cliff but it's basically water flowing off a dam, located in atlanta. There we have to walk for 30 minutes to reach the exact waterfall location and then we have to drop down to reach the bottom of the fall or climb the mountain to go to the top of the fall. Me and my brother, being in our twenties were easily able to do so. On the other hand, my mother and my uncle, who are in their 50s were not able to drop down or keep the same pace with us while walking. They were not able to experience what we did by standing under the fall and play with water and swim for a while. Because their physical strength did not allow them to.
Second reason being is that as a person grows old, their definition of enjoyment changes. Because for us teenagers and tweenagers, the world is still a new place and we are still learning and experiencing the natural beauty around us by going to different adventures but for our parents or older people, they have already been through that stage in their lives. Therefore, fun or enjoyment for them is something that is related to beaches or farms or somewhere where they find peace and quiet. Maybe i will turn into them when i reach their age. So, older people do enjoy but according to their own comfort. For example; a week ago my mother took us to do some nature study in a park. As she is an artist, she like making painting out in the open and often prefers quiet place to do so, like parks early in the morning, when there are no children running around. Me and my brother were bored to death and considered it waste of time. However, when she was finished with her painting, there was a sense of achievement i saw in her and the painting looked beautiful. She was able to capture exactly what she saw in the sky, a sun emerging from the clouds and birds flying with a slight tint of red n the sky. It was mesmerizing, just by looking at it i felt relaxed.
On the other hand, young people are so busy in studying, making a career for them and busy becoming independent and raising family, all these responsibility and objectives often makes the younger people less enjoyable because they do not get time to do so. Not everybody gets to be fortunate and enjoy to fullest along with other responsibilities therefore, when they reach the older age is only when they get time to enjoy their lives.
So, as for the conclusion, i would like to say that enjoyment is their for both the young and the older, it depends on situation and circumstances as to who gets to enjoy their time at what point in their lives. So, i would conclude by saying that younger people tend to enjoy more as they are active and have a lot of strength to do so.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, while, as for, as to, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2778.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 635.0 407.700716846 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37480314961 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01988110783 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35053600909 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442519685039 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 870.3 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5301856303 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.12 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20753438683 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671811947729 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773348828542 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14799794551 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847518903436 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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