Raising children, has been valued and even triggered a heated discussion over whether it is easier to raise children than in the past. Raising kids in the past, in many people’s ways, was harder. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that it is more effortless to raise children now, due to the contributions to education and technology.
What must be prioritized is that parenting today, instead of being a parent in the past, is easier because an affordable education is more accessible than ever before, by offering them a compulsory education and well-rounded education. To begin with, it is the compulsory education that ensures every student in the country to acquire the basic knowledge and skills. In detail, the government now provides all children with a compulsory education which includes many useful courses: math, English, computer science, history and so on. By contrast, such a large amount of knowledge could not be obtained in the past because when students from rural areas had no access to a good quality education. Moreover, never can we ignore the significance of the well-rounded education to parenting. To explain it further, by receiving a well-rounded education, children are more likely to develop their drawing talents, writing skills and interpersonal ability which will help to a cultivate a well-rounded adult; On the other hand, would they be able to acquire such a wide range of knowledge in the past when they had to receive a test-oriented education?
What is equally worth discussing is that the development of technology, instead of the limited sources about parenting in the past, helps parents to gain knowledge and tips on nurturing children by providing parents with social media and searching engines. To begin with, it is well-acknowledged that parents can communicate with other parents about issues they have in common on all sorts of social media. Specifically, with social media, parents can find parents who have similar problems easily and then discuss with them or learn from their mistakes based what they get from the Internet. On the contrary, under no circumstances would they get such a large amount of instant information in the past. Additionally, the technology makes it possible for parents to use powerful searching engines now. To be more specific, parents now are able to surf the Internet to acquire all the knowledge they need for nurturing kids including health, education, and psychology. However, it is impossible for them to get information on practical parenting skills and knowledge in the past.
Education, the foundation of students’ future development, is more accessible now; Technology, the useful tool for parents to obtain parenting skills, is more widely-used now. In conclusion, it is now more effortless to raise children now than in the past.
- Do you agree or disagree with the statement These days children spend more time on doing homework or participating in organized activities related to school or sports However they would be given more time to do whatever they want 87
- Do you agree or disagree It is easier for parents to raise children than it was 50 years ago 73
- TPO48 Integrated Writing 85
- TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree Two people can still become good friends if one of them has more money than the other one does 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 970, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nterpersonal ability which will help to a cultivate a well-rounded adult; On the other hand...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, in conclusion, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2400.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25164113786 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99550295218 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481400437637 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 4.94265232975 324% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.2968431398 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.333333333 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3888888889 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177854010528 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694702087201 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580385748384 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132637723296 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581041257661 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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